Love Hina Fan Fiction ❯ Third Crowd ❯ Chapter 1: " The Sun sets" ( Chapter 1 )

Third Crowd

Third Crowd is my visualization of what could happen if some unexpected visitors crash in the Hinata Sou for a while. For me it means total chaos and mayhem filled with laughter, power punches and flying turtles ^_^

Some explanation of the symbols used in the story

"------------" Person Talking

/-----------/ Person thinking

(---------) Person whispering

>-----------< Person shouting

Expect some conversations in a different language within the story, but don't worry I'll provide a cipher lists for the readers so you can decipher them yourselves ^_^

Disclaimer: Yup I don't own Love Hina, I own a manga of it though ^_^ ( Vol. 1 for now)

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Chapter 1 " The sun sets"

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March, Hinata Sou: ( 3:30 pm)

The Hinata residents are taken by surprise when Keitaro managed to pass the entrance exam for Tokyo University. Even after Keitaro passed he's not out of the woods yet and so he keeps on studying to prepare for Toudai. One afternoon Keitaro finishes studying for the day and steps outside the balcony.

"Ah.... Finally finished reviewing my notes..." Keitaro scratching his head

" Narusegawa is really pushing me too far...But I guess it's for my own good."

"At Last! All my hard work has paid off!" Keitaro said as he looks at the sky with tears gushing down from his eyes( all anime style like)

He looked down and saw three people climbing the steps of Hinat Sou.

" Huh? Who are those guys?"

Keitaro asked himself while running down to meet the visitors.

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At the Hinata Steps:

"Hey are you sure this is the place?"

The first guy asked. The first guy has emerald green eyes and dark blue hair neck length, he's wearing a round cap and blue shades, He's wearing a light green sweater and six pack pants. And he's carrying a backpack over his shoulder.

"I'm positive, when I was young I stayed here for some time while my father took care of his business."

The second guy answered. The second guy has faded red hair, long enough to touch the ground. He's wearing a white long sleeve polo T-shirt over a brown leather coat. He's wearing gray slock pants and black leather shoes. He's carrying a long object wrapped in cloth.

"Someone's coming" the third guy said pointing at Keitaro

The third guy has grayish blue hair, his eyes hidden under his black cap. He's wearing a black jacket with the sleeves folded three fourths. He's wearing gray jeans and black boots. Keitaro then approached the group and.

" Hello, Can I help you with something?"

" This is Hinata Sou right?" the second guy asks

"Yes you're at Hinata Sou, Miss"

This comment made the second guy almost hit Keitaro with the object he's holding.

"Hmm? Is there something wrong?" Keitaro noticed the second guy's facial expression change.

"Haha I told you look like a girl! = ^_^ = " The first guy teases

> SHUT UP! < The second guy hits the first guy on the head leaving him flat on the floor where he creates a marking on the ground due to the force.

"Wah! GOMENASAI!" Keitaro falls back and crawls away from Rem fearing he's next

"Ahem...I should be the one apologizing, we haven't introduced ourselves yet."

The second guy then pulls the first guy up

"But Ma I don't want to go to school...@_@"

"Hey WAKE UP!" The second guy slaps the first guy back and forth

"Eh? Where am I?"

"Hey, let's introduce ourselves"

"Oh, OKAY!" The first guy stands up straight

" I am Satoru Hiroyama NICE TO MEET YOU!" Satoru bows down

"But call me Sato okay? =^_^="

"My name is Remiscaldi Shingora, pleased to meet you." The second guy said after Sato

"You can call me Rem by the way."

" And lastly...."Rem looks at the third guy

" The name's Yaite Einori, If you don't want to die keep your distance..."Yaite warns Keitaro

"Waah.... Okay" Keitaro backs away

"I'm Kei...."

"Keitaro Urashima" Rem cuts Keitaro from introducing himself

"How did you...."

"I'll tell you later, besides we'll have a lot of time to talk later since we'll be staying here for a while."

"Huh? That's nice but..." Keitaro scratching his head.

"What?" Rem crossed his arms

"Well...This is an All Girls Dormitory now."

"Girls Dormitory?" Saito and Rem said in unison.

" So that means only girls can stay here right?" Rem concluded

"Only girls? Hmmm...." Saito then looks at Keitaro

"Eh? Yeah?" Keitaro backed off a little

"So that means Keitaro is a girl? =^_^="Sato asks

>WAAH! THAT'S NOT IT! < Keitaro objected

"Oh come on! You don't have to be shy; you're just like Rem then. =^_^="

>STAY DOWN! < Rem hits Sato down to the ground making another marking on the ground.

" I'm the manager here that's why I get to stay" Keitaro clears the situation

"Oh, Okay then, Sorry to have disturbed you.... Sato we're leaving"

"WHAT! But we just got here from China!" Sato grabs Rem by the leg and stuck there like glue

"What.... can...we...do...about...it?" Rem tries to kick Sato off his leg.

"............" Yaite just stands there looking at the others

"Eh?...maybe I can talk to the girls and arrange something. ^ , ^"Keitaro trying to keep thing from getting any weirder.

"REALLY! =^_^=" Sato then lets go of Rem and went for Keitaro's leg

"THANK YOU THANKYOU! ^_^"

"WAAAAH! LET GO! *_*; "

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Hinata Living Room: ( 04:00 pm)

Keitaro then leads the group to the living room where he called the female residents of Hinata to discuss the matter. Everyone were surprised to see visitors at Hinata and everyone sat down waiting for Keitaro to explain...

"Stay here? I think you know what this place is right?" Naru prepares to punch Keitaro

"Yeah but..."

"Maybe I approve of Miss Rem but the others..."

"Urk!.." Rem insulted by the remark but tries to keep his cool

"Uh Rem is a man Narusegawa..."Keitaro informs Naru

"Eh? REALLY! I'm sorry!"

"That's okay..." --_-- Rem looking a little depressed.

"If you're gonna let them stay here they will just add up to the expenses here and we have no choice but to use your allowance Keitaro ^_~" Kitsune remarks

" WHY ME!" Keitaro weeps on the floor

" You don't have to worry about that, we're willing to pay for our stay here, if you allow us to stay of course." Rem said.

"WELL THEN, WELCOME TO HINATA SOU!" Kitsune extending her arm to Rem

"KITSUNE!" Naru stops Kitsune from deciding so quickly.

" I don't approve." Motoko gives her vote.

"Motoko-Chan."

"My decision is final"

As the conversation goes on Haruka steps in the living room wearing the Hinata sou apron and smoking a cigarette.

"Hmm? We have some visitors?"

Everyone looks at Haruka and Keitaro explains the situation.

"That is a problem...Hmm?" Haruka then looks at Rem.

"It's been a while Haruka-San" Rem bows his head

"Oh, Rem-Kun? So what brings you here?"

"Eh?"

Everyone was surprised to find Haruka knows Rem. The girls wait for Haruka's explanation.

"Keitaro, you don't remember Rem? He stayed here when he was young. Both of you played together in some occasions."

Keitaro stops to think

"Hm? I really can't remember, sorry"

"That's okay you were only 4 then."

"Hey Aunt..."

Before Keitaro finishes Haruka gave Keitaro a back fist

"It's Haruka-San"

"If you want to know, Your grand mother is a good friend of Rem's grand father and occasionally stayed at the Inn. When Rem was about 6 years old his father left him in the care of your grandmother and stayed here."

"Oh.... I get it now."

"I just remembered Hinata Sou when we came in Japan and thought of staying here while were here...but I guess it changed over the years."

"Oh? Really.... Why not stay here then?" Haruka suggests

"Hmm? But isn't this a Girls Dormitory?"

"There's plenty of room anyway...Of course there are some rules to be applied..."

"Of course..."

>WAIT A MINUTE! < Motoko slams her hands at the table.

"He could have stayed here when he was young, but that doesn't change the fact that this is a Girls Dormitory! They can't stay here!"

" You don't know if they're just as perverted as Keitaro!"

"Hu hu hu I'm not a pervert... --_--"

Keitaro weeps at the corner.

" I assure you, I my self won't stoop down that low to catch a glimpse of a little girls body...."

"Little GIRL?" Motoko stands up with fury in her eyes

"Yeah, little girls.... am I wrong?" Rem squints at Motoko as if trying to provoke Motoko

Naru then started to talk to break the tension that was building between Motoko and Rem.

"You know they don't really look evil to me..." Naru remarks

"Yeah, It will be mean just to send them away." Mutsumi adds

"We don't mind!" Su and Sarah said

"Everyone..."Motoko's face saddened after hearing the girls' opinion.

"Grr....Then if they stay I will leave!"

"Motoko!" Keitaro tries to reason with Motoko

" Grr… Zan ryu ha!" Motoko sent Keitaro flying into the sky

" WAAAAAH! @_@" Keitaro spinned into orbit

"Wait a minute...."Rem stands up

"I don't want things to go this far so let's just have a bet." Rem slightly smiled

"What bet?" Motoko listened intently

"I can see you're a samurai? Let's have a duel, If you win we leave but if I win we stay, fair enough?"

Rem removes the cloth around the object his carrying and reveals it to be a katana.

"Heh! You're gonna regret challenging me." Motoko had a boastful grin

"I ACCEPT!" Motoko draws out her sword

"YAY! Duel! Duel!" Su and Sarah sing around the living room

"Uh? What's a duel? Is it tasty?" Su asks

"Wait a minute everyone...."Keitaro suddenly appeared out of nowhere

"Well then let's go outside..." Rem cuts him off

"Fine" Motoko glared at Rem

Both Rem and Motoko walks outside to begin the duel.

"Hey Rem!" Sato shouted

"Huh?" Rem looked back

"Are you sure this is the only way?" Sato looks serious.

"Don't worry I won't over do it." Rem steps outside

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Hinata Front yard: ( 5:30 pm)

Everyone then gathered outside to watch the duel. The sun is just about to set, everything was glowing orange, the sky, trees and the sea...Then the two fighters stood across each other in the Hinata's front yard.

Both of them were waiting for the duel to start.... And in a split second it begins....

"Here I come!" Motoko starts the duel

Motoko takes the initiative and strikes first. Her strikes were accurate and powerful but Rem just calmly blocks every one of Motoko's attacks.

"You're angry...."Rem remarked

"What?" Motoko looks irritated

"You're strikes are full of anger...I can feel it." Rem calmly dodges Motoko's attacks

"Grrr...."

Motoko continues to volley Rem with strikes and Rem just blocks every one. This situation is making Motoko angrier every second.

"You should calm your self...." Rem advises Motoko

"What are you saying?" Motoko continues to attack Rem

"Attacking when your angry clouds your judgement and makes you predictable and easy to read."

"Why would you care?" Motoko growled

"*Sigh* it's a pity..."

For a few more minutes it was the same situation. The onlookers were breathless as they watch the duel progress. Motoko's rage as of now is at its peak and she's ready to finish the duel. Then Motoko's last move made Rem Flinch and knowing this is a good opportunity to deliver a deadly blow Motoko unleashes her killer move.

"NOW! ZAN MA KEN!"

"What?...This is bad...."

The move pushed Rem back to a tree and every one is waiting to see the result of the duel.As the dust settled the figure of Rem is beginning to materialize. To everyone's surprise Rem was okay, he was able to block the attack with the sheath of his sword.

"What? Impossible!" Motoko looked surprised

"Hmm....That was a close one...." Rem brushes off some dust from his polo

"Well now I believe it's time to end this..." Rem said

" I can't agree more" Motoko looks really tired due to the offense she excelled.

Rem changes stance and is now holding his sword with his left arm. He puts the sword back in its sheath and crouches down.

" Uh oh...He's using his stronger arm...=^_^="

"Huh? Stronger arm?" Keitaro asks in curiosity

"Yep.... Rem's left handed, and his skills are better when he's using his left arm. =^_^="

"You're friend is gonna lose." Yaite said in a cold voice.

" Humph! I'm gonna defeat you!" Motoko charges towards Rem.

"Good bye..." Rem steps forward and…

In a split second Rem disappears and reappears near Motoko. Motoko was caught by surprised and was defenseless

" Ou...Sempuu Tenshi Ha!

Rem then delivers a spinning attack. Motoko was able to block some of the attacks but her guard slowly deteriorated due to the continuous spinning attack Rem is executing and it didn't take long,she received a blow to her rib area. After Motoko suffers the first hit Rem shifts and delivers an upward slash taking Motoko into the air. After the final blow Motoko drops on the ground and Rem slowly walks away.

"Whew! It's over.... Hmm?"

To Rem's surprise Motoko tries to get up using her sword as a support.

"It's...not...over..." Motoko barely stands up and resumes her fighting stance

"...I admire your fighting spirit but... I know you're just ignoring the pain...in a few seconds you'll faint because of the pain so try to rest...."

"NO! It's not over!" Motoko breathes heavily and it's obvious she is in extreme pain

" Accept defeat...a slight push is enough to bring you down..."

After that, Rem walks away proclaiming victory over Motoko, who can no longer fight. Out of energy Motoko kneels on the ground. Trying to understand what just happened. The duel ends as the sun sets marking the end of the day and the beginning of a new story at Hinata Sou....

Battle ends( 5:57 pm)

-Chapter 1 End-

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I hope I started it right for everyone's enjoyment ^_^

If you have something to say good or bad please do so, it will help me improve my writing.

Some information for the readers:

Gomenasai - means sorry in Japanese

Zan Ma Ken- it means Evil cutting sword or Evil cutting slash

Sempuu Tenshi Ha- it means Angel Whirlwind slash

Thank you readers for taking time in reading my first work to be posted for the public. I'm looking forward in making you, the readers, laugh at the jokes in the story. I hope it will help you in any way it can.

Well then, see you in the next chapter ^_^

Love Y'all O_o