| "The Bermuda Island" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 12:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 6 it was great. You are an artist.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 12:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 5 it was great.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 12:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 3 it was great.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 12:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 4 it was great.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 12:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 2 it was great.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 12:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 1 it was great.
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Reviewed By: an idiot On: September 16, 2003 11:20 CDT
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That was interesting to say the least. I wasn't too surprised to find Brock the one who was the killer. I have severe doubts that Gary could do that and he seemed to be the only possible one if Brock had turned out to be innocent. I liked Mewtwo's comment of why he didn't do anything to stop Brock at night. It made sense. Why not now write another fic with Ash and the May from the Ruby/Sapphire games? She's also going to be in the new Pokemon series. Which means that Ash will have a chance at another girl. Whatever you choose to do, I'll be looking for it. |
Reviewed By: an idiot On: September 06, 2003 12:44 CDT
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I forgot to mention that I thought that the May in the story was from Ruby/Sapphire. So, I was a little surprised to find out that May was Gary's sibling. |
Reviewed By: An idiot On: September 02, 2003 11:38 CDT
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Well, so far you've now ruled out Morty. Because he wouldn't be able to watch himself doing Whitney from the window. Also, right now the only one's that don't really seem to have an alibi that I know of (or think of)are Brock, Pryce, and Blaine. Though, my prime suspect is Brock. He could easily be going through issues with not being able to get a girl at all. So right now I believe that it's Brock, although I will have to change my opinion if you make him clear in later chapters. Though, I can certainly rule out Mewtwo because of how you mentioned that he was with Erika when Misty was killed. Though, I really don't like killing, I certainly want to see this killer stopped no matter what. Please continue soon. |
Reviewed By: RedDevil7690 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2003 18:58 CDT
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1. Damn you for killing Misty
2. May is Garys OLDER sister.
3. Eh I dunno. Good job fixing the run ons and speech mess ups. |
Reviewed By: DestroyerX On: August 12, 2003 03:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
DestroyerX Here!
Hey man u are the bomb.
while everyone else's sickens me with stupid ash/misty stories x_x, your story is beter since i Really F*ckingly hate misty and i REALLY Like May since she is really hotter than the rest. good for misty that she didnt get anybody and got killed (die b*t*h DIE!)!!! Mwahahahahahaha!!!!!! and i agree with the other viewers that you should add more of Ash/May relationship in the story or it would kinda suck (since Ash is always the main character) and i am glad that sweet Erika got laid and so did Melody (since in the movie, that she liked Ash instead of Lance, so she couldnt get Ash) and i also hope that Brock and Claire would get laid, so as Sabrina and Whitney. and i think that either Pryce or gary killed Misty since Pryce cant get leaid (i bet) and gary wanted his sister to be happy forever with Ash. Anyways i like your work man. and plz email me when your story is updated.
@ moondestroyerx@yahoo.com
Keep up the good work!
DestroyerX Out!!!! |
Reviewed By: An Idiot On: August 09, 2003 15:47 CDT
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I forgot to mention that I wasn't liking the fact that Misty was killed. I know I wanted May with Ash, but I also wanted to see Misty with someone. Not dead on the floor. |
Reviewed By: An Idiot On: August 09, 2003 15:46 CDT
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I think that it would have been better if you had given more details of Ash and May's time together. It was still quite good either way.
I don't see that anyone can be a suspect. Because Misty can't be a suspect because she's now dead. I know that it's not any of the girls, because you stated that it was a guy. So, that rules out about six more characters. It can't be Ash, he was still in bed with May. I've been able to narrow it down (at least to who my prime suspects are) to five characters. Brock, Pryce, Morty, Blaine, and a random character that you chould easily add in who would be on the island, but not with the group. I can't rule out Mewtwo, but he just doesn't seem likely. Though, Brock and Morty, are only part of my prime suspects because I can't think of anything for their defense. As the chapters go on, I'll be able to figure out more. |
Reviewed By: An idiot On: August 03, 2003 12:15 CDT
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I had thought that it would go a little further on than just at the end of the battle. I noticed you didn't captitalize Mightyena a few times. Overall I thought that was a good chapter. Now I want to know what happens right after the battle. Now that I think of it, will anyone actually die in this? Now who will Misty go with I wonder? I would also appreciate it if you would update when you have decided it will be updated; as in soon like you said in the fic! |
Reviewed By: RedDevil7690 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2003 22:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude your paragraph struxture is very difficult to read. You have to many run on sentences and I had trouble realizing who was talking because you had all the speech shoved together. Otherwise nice job, hope its longer because I dont see where the murder part is. |
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