| "The Marines Journey - The SHODAN crisis" Reviews/Comments [ 57 ] |
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Reviewed By: The Most Dudely Dude On: November 25, 2004 03:43 CST
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Dude. You know Amy's 12 right? I certainly hope you're not like that in real life. Because that would get you put in prison! Remember, 16 and under is bad, 17+ is good.
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Reviewed By: The Most Dudely Dude On: November 25, 2004 03:43 CST
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Dude. You know Amy's 12 right? I certainly hope you're not like that in real life. Because that would get you put in prison! Remember, 16 and under is bad, 17+ is good.
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Reviewed By: The Most Dudely Dude On: November 25, 2004 03:43 CST
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Dude. You know Amy's 12 right? I certainly hope you're not like that in real life. Because that would get you put in prison! Remember, under 16 and under is bad, 17+ is good.
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Reviewed By: Tweaker On: November 03, 2004 09:20 CST
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Well I skipped ahead because of the title of this chapter it interested me. Now, at this point the writing seems to have done downhill. It seems less descriptive and a little more repetitive. I haven't read the other chapters but have they really been stuck in a mansion the whole time? That's really boring. And what's with all the 'alternate' versions? That is so, so crap. I'm sorry man, but I agree with the flamers when I say that they are really holding this story back. (I guess the flamers said the story was crap in general but I think it has potential). And then you have not just 'alternates' you have 'upgrades' which are even worse! Seriously dude that's not cool.
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Reviewed By: Tweaker On: November 03, 2004 09:14 CST
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You should include all the scenes in their entirety because it feels wrong that some of them won't see the light of day. I know lots of people say this is crap but its addictive and also I like uncut stuff. Having read ahead though I do think that the characters go downhill and get a bit too cliched for their own good...
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Reviewed By: Tweak On: November 03, 2004 09:09 CST
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After much deliberation with friends and reading your other works, I have concluded that this is probably your best piece of work so far, and yes, I read your fanfiction stories too. But I have some serious gripes about a few things- 1*The comments break up the flow of the story 2*Anaethoron or whatever is a demon. And a Hell Kinght. He is created to fight and is a primal creature with little to no intelligence. I know you included the higher brain function thing but demons have no free will!!! THey are carnal creatures that are fuelled on hate! And flesh! And other bad things!
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Reviewed By: Tweak On: November 03, 2004 09:00 CST
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I think, dear friend, that you have a psychopathic stalker. Have you read the review below? Then again, this is NC-17, and some NC-17 people aren't normally nice people.
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Title: Your stories rock!
Reviewed By: Me On: November 03, 2004 08:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Piccard, you suck DICK!! Your the biggest cock sucker alive!!!! DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DO YOU GET THE POINT NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Tweak On: November 03, 2004 08:48 CST
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That was just me being p'sophical Think about it man!!!1
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Reviewed By: Tweak On: November 03, 2004 08:47 CST
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So long ago you wrote this: "Hello everyone, Piccard here. This is my first work of fiction and I am hoping that it will be a good one. I will welcome all comments and criticisms because, lets be honest, I can't get good at this if I only get comments saying that I'm good…" Remember when you wrote that? But do you really believe in improving yourself, or is this some sort of vehicle for you?
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Reviewed By: Miss Poppyworth On: November 03, 2004 02:41 CST
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Actually I don't know if you can call these flamers flamers, they raise valid points. -------------------------- (Also, they are far too nice.)
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Reviewed By: FlamingWaldo On: November 03, 2004 02:37 CST
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lol you suck *smile* I am sensing a distinct pattern here
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Title: After much consideration...
Reviewed By: Nicknack On: September 29, 2004 03:29 CDT
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You seriously need to liven up the story: the characters hardly go anywhere or do anything interesting, it's the same thing every chapter. I read the last review - even a fic done for a laugh should have some direction
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Reviewed By: BigWillyStyle On: September 28, 2004 09:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Some of these bad reviews giving type people ought to remember one thing: this is what I like to call a 'muck-about' fic - it obviously is. Sure it's never going to be published, but that's the whole point. It's fanfiction! Sure there's a bit of fancharacter overload, but it's like a budget game that you buy and have a moderately enjoyable play on for awhile, then discard. I imagine that a fic of this calibre was something that you maybe spend a half an hour/a few hours a night writing up. It's no epic and there's no plot, but that's not the point - it's just something you read for fun - For a laugh. I think those other reveiws forgot that. I'll probably just quickly read a bit of these chapters each day. The story is no award-winner, but it's clearly not trying to be, it's just a laugh. Maybe other people should remember that. I will give this a '6' overall. Like those 60% games you buy for a few bucks and have a go at, it's not Lord Of The Rings but it's a story, and a laugh in a few places.
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Title: Sue's - They're like ants
Reviewed By: SKILL9000 On: September 28, 2004 04:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another hideous Sue-fic. Study the Sue, learn the Sue, remember that everyone HATES THE SUE.
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