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| "I Am A Monster" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Title: Powerful
Reviewed By: WhisperingWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2019 21:57 PDT
Comment/Review:
That was a very powerful story, the visual and emotional pull of
the words reaching down deep into your very soul. I loved it, and
I'm glad Sueric linked me to your story. This is truly amazing.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us. And please, keep
writing! ~Wolf
| Reviewed By: libertyrjac [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2007 00:06 PST
Comment/Review:
Wonderfully written. You've portrayed the cruelty of reality in a beautiful way. I hope to read more.
| Title: Beatutiful.
Reviewed By: Sally the Necromancer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2006 16:22 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story was, simply put, amazing. Honestly, this story is the best original fanfiction that I've ever read.
| Reviewed By: Evil Jokerman 666 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2005 15:49 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow... I really loved this. it's just so... I dunno how to describe it, but I love this. I love your style of writing, its WAY better than mine and im envious! You're writing is beautiful.
| Title: FFRG review
Reviewed By: BakaBokken [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2005 02:00 PDT
Comment/Review:
I realize that this has already been reviewed a few times by the FFRG, but since you've clearly cleaned up the story since you first submitted it, I'd like to comment on the updated version. ^^ I must say that I'm highly impressed with this short story - the imagery, allusions, symbols, and style are all so very nicely done. You did an amazing job playing off the social prejudices and hypocrisy in society (also, the POV was very complex and made for an excellent read), and the story is so very deep and real that I'm left with a sense of awe after reading it. I was so blown away by the quality of writing that I didn't even notice any grammar or spelling errors that might have been there in the first version! XD (Either that, or Sue just did an awesome job of catching them and helping you polish the piece up... which is likely. ^^) Very impressive work - I hope to read more from you! Thank you for submitting your piece to the FFRG - I enjoyed reading it!
| Title: A Non-FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 19:18 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
My computers are screwed up so no chat programs for me, but anyway, it was really good to read this short story. I enjoyed how it held substance. Also, grammar-spelling errors? What grammar-spelling errors ?_? I was not really looking for them because I was pretty involved in the story, but nothing was blatant. Sari mentioned rhythm, and I would definitely have to agree. The lull of the words is probably what got me so involved. No doubt it was those mad songwriter skills coming out. OH MY GOD. Your story won't let me review! I'm going to KILL IT! I'm going to...AAAAAAAAARRRGGG!!!
| Title: FFARG review
Reviewed By: Sari-15 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2005 17:30 PDT
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting to FFARG. To start, I was extremely impressed with this one-shot. It was very thought provoking and well written. Aside from the grammar issues which can be cleaned up with a good beta, the rhythmic quality of your writing really does shine. My initial impression as I read was that it had a very poetic quality to it. Your description is sound and strong, which managed to pull me into the story, enabling me to see everything unfold with my own eyes as opposed to telling me what happened. The only thing that pulled me out a little was the size of the paragraphs. Breaking them up a little would make it easier for you to retain the readers attention as they read. The idea of the 'monster' intrigued me, although the POV considered himself a monster...his actions toward the family refuted that. Wonderfully done. I look forward to seeing more of your work.
| Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2005 16:50 PDT
Comment/Review:
I just finished reading your oneshot, and I wanted to let you know my overall impression of it. The wording and imagery you use is quite powerful, very evocative, and very, very strong. Put together as more of a stream of thought than an actual 'story', the format works well for you, and I enjoy what you've created here. While there are some quite significant grammatical issues, a good beta could help you clean this up and help you to polish it a little. I really do want to stress, though, that despite the *technical* things, the actual crux of your fic really has a lot of qualities that are nearly impossible to 'learn'. They normally manifest as more of instinctual writing than things that could be taught in a class somewhere, and I am very impressed with this. You said that you write to entertain or to make a point. This is, on the whole, a very strong piece of work. I was completely entertained! Thanks for submitting to FFRG! I really hope you consider trying to polish this piece!
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