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Title: It's abandoned =(
Reviewed By: Death-By-Minnow [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2008 17:53 CDT
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As awesome as this was, it loses points for abandonement. I wish you'd have finished, oh well. That aside, I truly enjoyed reading. It did its job well, and several times.
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Reviewed By: onimura On: May 25, 2008 01:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Is this abandoned?
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Reviewed By: abrakadabraalakazam On: May 24, 2008 12:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Entertaining enough story so far, though not to the level of Stormwarning part 1 as far as I've read anyway. I just wanted to point out that colorless liquids is less visible on white cloth than it is on colored cloth (I know the difference between cloth and clothes). It doesn't matter if it's dark or not.
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Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2007 20:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Are you ever going to finish this? or r u like me and cannot use a home computer. I really want to see this one finnished.
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Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2007 11:49 CDT
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Genma has nearly succeeded in killing Ranma, and the excuse that he was doing the 'right thing' won't cut it, especially when it's blatantly clear that his actions were 'self' motivated. Add in the fact that his actions jeopardized the lives and well-being of others as well... It's one of my biggest gripes concerning Ranma 1/2 fanfiction that authors rarely, if ever, have anyone other than Ranma truly 'suffer' the consequences of their actions. At the very least, I would expect Genma to be ostracized by the Tendo sisters, if not forcibly evicted from the Tendo Dojo as a continuing threat, and attacked on sight by Ranma, Kodachi and possibly others with the intent of inflicting grievous bodily injury. Not just beaten up, but not necessarily killed, either.
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Title: fantastic
Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2007 21:21 CST
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wow this story is fantastic thank you, i realy hope that you will update a.s.a.p.
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Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2006 14:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Although you made some minor spelling mistakes throughout the fic(I have the same problem) it was probably one of the best that I have read so far. I long to see this fic completed. Problem for me is I cannot see Ranma Dumping anyone but Kodachi.
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Reviewed By: Neil Lennon On: May 03, 2006 02:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm haveing a lot of fun with this one. Keep it comeing.
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Reviewed By: edge33 On: April 20, 2006 13:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
great fic, hope you continue it, or was that the ending? if so you should put that it is completed.
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Reviewed By: Tuisto [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 13:48 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good, very... original concept.
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Title: An amazing erotic story.. with a good plot even.
Reviewed By: ThreadWeaver [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2006 14:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am very impressed with this work. A very erotic tale with a plot that carries the story well. The graphic scenes are well described, using much more eloquent descriptions rather than the base carnal words alone. I am very much looking forward to see how the story pans out and who/how-many Ranma ultimately ends up with. The fireworks that erupt when all the ladies figure out the magnitude of his... activities... will be interesting to witness. Yet it wouldn't suprise me if their 'addiction' to him allows them to accept sharing. I agree with an earlier writer regarding the natural, and geneticly predisposed, tendancies of the average male, and that this fic brings that idea to fruition. It will be interesting to see how the female trait of finding a single superior male and 'nesting' plays out. It should be noted that women very often will 'nest' with a stable partner, yet choose to in some cases bear the children of a more 'physically exciting and superior' male, even if the nest-mate is kept unaware of said coupling. In other words ladies, don't get mad at guys for their genes when probabilites and studies show that women are just as likely to do the same. Women are just better at hiding it. Knowing that, this story has the promise to take on some very interesting twists and turns. My only compaint to the story is that some of the paragraphs can be very long, making it easy to get off track when reading. Please keep up the good work and update soon!
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Reviewed By: LemonLover01 On: February 12, 2006 21:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm very happy to see this continue. I look forward to more. You're doing an awesome job.
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Reviewed By: tomdj1701 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 19:55 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Execllentlly done. Looking forward to what you have in store for the next ones. Keep up the great work.
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Reviewed By: Brett W. Hall On: February 03, 2006 19:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally, someone who recognizes that men are NOT naturally monogamous. While monogamy does have some advantages, it is not a natural state of being for a human male, and comes with its own inherent disadvantages (primarily control of said male by a single female, and numerous lonely, childless, females). It IS a rather effective, if limited, means of population control, though (even if it needlessly jeopardizes the life of a solitary female via multiple childbirths). Man (the human male, not necessarily the human species) is naturally polygamous... but, like monogamy, it too has its own advantages and disadvantages. To the majority of teenage boys polygamy most often equates to frequent and liberal sex, which for a young male with a hyperactive sex-drive sounds great. Once they've matured, and learned quite a bit more about dealing with females... it isn't necessarily all that attractive any longer (the inter-personal relationships among a group of intimately involved individuals can be a pure nightmare at times). Unfortunately, in the majority of the fan fictions I've read, wherein Ranma gains himself multiple partners... most are unbelievably unrealistic in regards to the inter-personal interactions of the participants (ie - ALL of the females are bisexual and sleep with their 'co-wives' when Ranma's unavailable) and arguments/fights/disagreements between the involved parties are few and far between (if they ever even occur in the first place). Hmmm... getting a little wordy on a subject for which I am hardly an expert. In any case, excellent story so far (although I found Ranma and Akane's interaction between the first two chapters seemingly at odds with each other and didn't really care for how you all but painted Nabiki as a prostitute... I agree that she may have used sex on occasion to get something she wanted, but her initial deal with Ranma was blatant prostitution with absolutely no emotional investment... seemingly for either of them). In any case, I'd like to see Ranma admit what he's done to all of the girls and try to work from there, rather than individually or, taking Genma's method, do nothing and hope it resolves itself. And, in this situation, while I would expect to see loads of sexual encounters (and not just between Ranma and individual girls), I would also enjoy reading about how they function as a group and deal with the naturally occurring problems that would arise from such an arrangement (something rarely, if ever, noted, other than in passing, in other fan fictions).
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Reviewed By: AzureSky [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2006 17:44 CST
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Great new chapters. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2005 18:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well written. I hope to see the same kind of standard in my own work. the sex scenes are well written as well. even though i normally prefer A VERY descriptive account on sexual encounters. Please continue this work soon
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Reviewed By: Tai Khan On: December 21, 2005 10:31 CST
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Looking forward to more, hopefully soon. Just wished that you'd give Nabiki some redeeming qualities, instead of keeping her totally self-centered, and that you'd allow Ranma to grow both emotionally and mentally, rather than just physically. Bored to tears with the ultra-naive, bone-headed, and extremely easily manipulated idiot savant Ranma.
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Reviewed By: Shihanna On: December 14, 2005 07:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's quite interesting indeed. I'm glad a friend of mine told me about this story. I almost never come to MM anymore, but every now and then something quite good does pop up. I hope to see more of this as soon as possible. :D
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Reviewed By: tomdj1701 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2005 15:10 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic, sex plus plot = great lemon story. Hope you update this one soon.
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Reviewed By: dana_san [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2005 00:06 CST
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Just amazing - sex and even a coherent, good plot! Yet Ranma is still true to Ranma!
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Reviewed By: narutoholic On: November 09, 2005 16:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice wanna see if kasumi and nabiki get ranma instead of akane
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Title: Your great fic
Reviewed By: Hiryo [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2005 22:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!! I want to read more!!!!! That fic banned me to the screen for such high-quality fanfic. I added you already to my prefered authors on my settings as well on my homepage. And I await greedily for your next installment!!!! Please update soon...
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Reviewed By: Shakeval [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2005 02:54 CST
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great story, bet even if ranma loses, very unlikely, the book will reject the amazons. a magic book is usually sentient, too a point.
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Title: Chapter 20
Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2005 01:27 CST
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Pfeh. Amazons. Fic is still good though. :)
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Reviewed By: Lord_Raa [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2005 12:55 CST
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Ohh, plot. I like.
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Reviewed By: JohnnyG [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2005 10:01 CST
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I usually don't follow lemon series for two reasons. First, they tend to have no plot. Second, the writing is often terrible. I'm glad to say that neither seems to be the case here. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: NullFactor [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2005 19:58 CST
Comment/Review:
Thanks for your comments everyone. I'd hoped to post the next chapter last wekend, but I had to work so I didn't have time. Hopefully, I'll be able to put it up sometime this week, but no promises. The next couple of chapters will be a bit more plot-oriented rather than just more sex. My image of this story has changed from when I first started writing it, however, and I have to admit that the plot/story elements are going to be less important and prevalent than the erotic ones. I agree that the last few chapters have been too unbalanced, though. Anyway, I hope you continue to read and enjoy my stories. Null Factor
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Reviewed By: Random Reviewer On: October 31, 2005 09:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty awesome! Everything a reader would look for to get them off for the day (j/k ^^). There are small errors in grammer, but nothing really outstanding. You've been going through several different scenes so far, but eventually you'll run out... the fanfiction is already all out sex with little plot elements. As it is now, its sex... minor plot... sex again. Not that there is anything wrong with that ^^. But wouldn't it be more interesting if it was more than just sex?
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Reviewed By: BLAQUE KAT On: October 31, 2005 06:13 CST
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I found it entertaining and burst out laughing by the sudden proposition. I can just imagine Nabiki's face when Ranma came up with the proposal. Actually I'm still snickering... Can't say anything more and can't wait to read the next chapter. Keep updating... Ja Ne
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Reviewed By: jffg On: October 31, 2005 02:17 CST
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I hope to read more soon.
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