| "Why is it snowing?" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Title: Why is it Snowing?
Reviewed By: dancing_pen On: April 13, 2007 01:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good job. this was short but sweet and i really enjoyed it! keep writing! ;>
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Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: LadyLark [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2006 20:57 CST
Comment/Review:
You have a great start to well written character study. I like the introspectiveness to this. However I agree with my other reviewers, it needs to be fleshed out more. The story starts out a little too quickly, it is like he is asking the question in the title and then going from there. If you are going that route, I would suggest restating the question in the mental dialogue, as it stands it jarred me a bit. You may want to reconsider this phrase "He got his answer. It was worth." I didn't see a question that fit the answer. Also that felt very incomplete to me. In general the Technical aspects are there, you just need to work on adding more. Filling in the blanks and setting the mood. You've got a good start & I look forward to seeing more of your work. Thank you for submitting to FFRG!
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Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: NekoKamiFL [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 14:30 CST
Comment/Review:
Well, first off I would like to say that I did enjoy this piece. It seems like you put a good amount of thought into it. It was not boring, and it made me think a bit. I found no spelling errors and only a couple grammatical mistakes that could be easily fixed. Also, I feel that a few things could have been explained a little more in depth. I hope you continue writing and thank you for submitting this to the FFRG!
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Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Yuugi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 14:01 CST
Comment/Review:
This story has a good start to it and a good idea, but it feels as if I am missing something. Some things weren't described as well as they could have been, creating a skeleton-like effect to your story. Put some meat on those bones. You also have some sentence fragments and typos that you might want to look for before posting the story. A self-revision would help. Overall, I found this story cute (in its own way) and interesting, having a look into Kenshin's mind when he sees the first snowfall of winter. Thank you for submitting to the FFARG!
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Reviewed By: Karasaki230 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2005 18:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool story! It brings a message! Keep writing!
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Title: My Review (duh!)
Reviewed By: Hanabi jou [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2005 17:58 CST
Comment/Review:
Short and Wonderful! Just like my review!
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