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| "A Story Retold" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: AniDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2002 19:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wai! Wai! Wai! Wai!!! I loved it!! Sorry it took me so long to review... Stupid school and homework... -_-... Anyway, it was great! ^^. Glad I could help out! | Reviewed By: Teski On: September 14, 2002 17:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
What happens next
This i an inticing fan fic and it was very well written!!! | Reviewed By: Winter On: September 13, 2002 14:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really enjoying this fic! And after that last ending, I *really* have to read more! Yui is my favorite character in FY, so I always love to read fics centering on her (thanks for turning this to Yui's POV!). =)
The baby angle was entirely unexpected, but I like how you handled it. Not everyone knows how to deal with a newborn automatically, especially not a fifteen-year old girl, so I thought Yui's initial reaction to the baby was fairly realistic. I also love how she came to her 'realizations' about how to live her life, as opposed to wallowing in suffering. I thought that was her biggest flaw in the series (I haven't seen the OVAs, either).
One little nitpick I do have, though, is on Nakago. I suppose it really is all up to an individual's interpretation, but Nakago happeend to be my second favorite character in the series, so reading him being so cruel is, well, very cruel! *g* But it is your story, and you have every right to portray the characters as you see them, so pay no attention to my ramblings.
Again, I am looking forward to reading more of this fic. Cliffhanger endings aside, there are still a lot of very interesting developments that I'd like to see play out, especially in regards to Yuiren. And, of course, the summoning of Seiryuu. *g*
Take care,
Winter | Reviewed By: AniDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2002 17:07 CDT
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To writer and The Name Game: Well... I don't know what everyone else thinks, but I personaly think this little review battle is entertaining.... Maybe it's just me... ^^;;;;
To The Name Game: Okay... I do see some of your points, but there's some stuff where you're just straying from your original point. Not to mention making false accusations. Did you even read the whole fic? Because if you had, you'd have noticed that the author's skill improves with each chapter, and any biases that might have been present in earlier chapters compleatly disapear by the end. In the latest few chapters, all characters have seemed to be compleatly in character to me.
Now, lesse.... Yeah, I think that's it.... And to the author: You have a waaayyyy better chance of becoming famous then I do, I can tell you that much. You're style COULD use a bit of improvement, but like I mentioned earlier, you're getting better with every chapter, so keep it up! ^^ | Reviewed By: Katrina Kadabra [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2002 21:16 CDT
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Thank you, Trool! ^_^
To Name Game:
I never said this was based on the OVA. Where did you read that? This takes place right after the first 52 episodes and does not take into account to OVA at all. As the writer, it is at my discretion when I start the story. You as the reader merely assumed where I picked up. When I posted this story on other sites, I actually wrote that detail out. But since this is my rough draft on this site, I've yet to add that on.
My apologies for calling you a coward, but that has been my general experience with people who leave anonymous comments. They usually say something rude and then leave. I still think you are inconsiderate, because you are leaving comments that are vague in description and directly insult the author, not giving constructive criticism. If you didn't like my story, that's fine. Tell me what you would like to see happen to make it a better story. Where does insulting me without reason get either of us?
For the record, I have seen the OVA and do know the difference between that and the original series. I personally did not like what the OVA did with the story, which is why I chose not the write about it.
If you want to reply further, please e-mail me through my profile. I don't think everyone reading my reviews cares to see us going back and forth on this topic.
As far as me being famous, yes, we WILL see. ^_^ | Reviewed By: Trool On: September 10, 2002 20:57 CDT
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This is a great story. Don't listen to "The Name Game" I don't think he know what he's talking about. The story is about Yui. The point of the story is to tell what would happen if she did get raped...And if "The Name Game" doesn't get it then it's his loss. | Reviewed By: The Name Game On: September 10, 2002 17:53 CDT
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Hate to burst your bubble, as well, for you seem to forget that this story you have written was based on the OVA ,where both characters are more mature, especially Miaka ,after the ordeal Yui had put her through. So, if your writing will based only on what you want to see rather than what happened then you're making a big mistake in writing something that should have put emphasis on things like the timeline of the story. If you're going to write something, make sure that you consider all things first especially since this is from somewhat akin to the OVA series.
And if you think I'm a coward ,then I think you are stupid for you don't know the difference between the original 52 episodes from the OVA.
As for being famous, let's wait and see if you will ever be one, shall we? | Reviewed By: Katrina Kadabra [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2002 07:03 CDT
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Hate to burst your bubble, but authors genereally DO write based on their feelings. Yes, this story reflects a lot of my views. It's SUPPOSED to! Even Yu Watase said of Fushigi Yugi, "Once my story gets published in a magazine, then it becomes part of each reader's imagination, fueled by the way he or she feels about the characters." So if you don't like how I perceive the characters in my story, no one is forcing you to read it. I don't have anything against Miaka, but I like Yui better, and I thought it would would make an interesting story to explore her views on things, or rather my interpretation of her views.
As I've said before, I think people who leave insulting comments without their ID on this site are frankly just cowards. But if you're going to insist on it, I see things as follows: Famous writers always get a lot of bad feedback from people who don't realize their true genius! ^_^ | Reviewed By: The Name Game On: September 09, 2002 20:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
All I see is your own biased point of view with regards to the character( Miaka and Yui). Writer like you will never learn when to get rid of your own biased point of view. | Reviewed By: AniDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2002 12:49 CDT
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*twitches* Must.... Have... More..... This is getting really good! I wanna know what happens neeeeeext! | Reviewed By: AniDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2002 20:35 CDT
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Wai! Wai! Wai! This is getting good! ^^ I love how Yui named her daughter Yuiren. I hope you write more soon! | Reviewed By: AniDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2002 22:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty good! Except just to informe you, it's Taka, not Tama. (Tama is actually the name of Mitsukake's cat...) And also, Taiitsukun, not Tytskun. BUT other then that and a few spelling/grammar/typo errors, the fic's great! Very original concept! I can't wait to read more! ^^ | Reviewed By: Katrina Kadabra [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2002 10:01 CDT
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*tee-hee* Okay, I get the hint. I'm glad you guys are enjoying it,though, and I want to apologize for such long pauses in between each chapter. In truth, I have actually written a lot more to this story than what you see here, but I don't write the chapters in order all the time, thus there can be long delays when I go to post the chapters in their chronological order. But thanks so much for being patient with me. I hope you find this story worth your while when it's finally done. | Reviewed By: Trool On: June 18, 2002 14:30 CDT
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It's not fair. You said this didn't end in a clifhanger..... Ohh well. You need more...much more. Really good so far though. Once the intro part got done everything just felt very good. I really got into the story. YAY. But you got to write more soon. | Reviewed By: Rika On: May 24, 2002 01:29 CDT
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When's the next chapter going to be out?!! | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] |
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