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Reviewed By: Short Rochester [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 17:25 CDT
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HOW could you write a POKEMON fic without mentioning Jess OR Jim?!?!?!?!??!?!??!?!!?
sr |
Reviewed By: Ballistic [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 11:59 CDT
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I hope I'm not too demanding, but could you people please make only 1 review each? If you have more comments afterwards, you could always email me with any more comments or questions. My address is listed in these reviews...
BTW, I am sorry, but I will not be having many romantic scenes in this fic. |
Reviewed By: Aeris is dead [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 03:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa! I like really really REALLY enjoyed your story! It has to be like the most original I have ever read. I hope you update soon cause I'm gonna be waiting!! Oh yeah I personally think you should add more B/V but it's not a romance so I'll shut up...Oh you know what would be cool?! If you made Vegeta encounter some Pokemon and one of the weird looking ones liked him and wanted to come home and be his pet! A funny looking one like a clefairy or a chansey! No ugly pokemon like dunsparce, piloswine, or swinub. Ughh they are so gross! (Especially dunsparce!) |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 00:47 CDT
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Hmm. Well I've read all there is to read. You've got a great idea going here ^_~ Good job. Keep at it! |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 00:25 CDT
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Hehe!
"Can I...touch it?" *Prodprod* Mwehe...I got a chuckle out of that.
Skipping forward a chapter or two....
Ouchie...beastie no attackie the city! x-x |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 00:18 CDT
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Dum dum dummmmmmmmmm, the Tail of Doom makes its appearance! :D
Mwehehehe. Nifty. I wonder how they'll respond.... |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 00:14 CDT
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Oh dear........stupid Freiza. He always messes things up =\ |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 00:12 CDT
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I notice that during the Jesse/James sequence, you start many of the paragraphs with the name Jesse or James. It gets a wee bit repetitive. ^_^::: Sentence variation, por favor?
My main question is...well...probably stupid. In the beginning of this chapter, you mention that Bulma is frustrated. The computers are fried and at least a dozen CPUs need to be replaced. Why is that? Keeping a CPU active for 48 hours or more should be no impressive feat...ne? |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 00:06 CDT
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Hmm. Maybe Gohan IS a Pokemon. *Cackle* I'd love to see them fit HIM in a Pokeball...>P |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2002 00:03 CDT
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Fwee! Grammar's much better. No nitpicks. ^_^ It'll be interesting to see Gohan adjusting to Poke-land...^_~ |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2002 23:55 CDT
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The only nitpicks I have are grammatical. I noticed this in the first chapter, too.
"Blah", said Character X.
Correct: "Blah," said Character X.
Punctuation goes inside quotation marks. ^_^
Remember your tenses! :D "You're mom is nice." should be "Your mom is nice." 'You're' is a contraction for 'you are' -- 'your' is possessive. I'm sure you already know this, but I'm just one of those long-winded reviewers :D Gomen! Great job so far. |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2002 23:49 CDT
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Ut ohs...^_~ |
Reviewed By: Ballistic On: August 05, 2002 21:21 CDT
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I write this fic on a palm pilot. It is very hard to see the screen. Also when I convert it to word documents, sometimes a word or something isn't changed well, and it comes out as a typo. I usually don't have much time to proof read, but I have been trying on my last few chapters... |
Reviewed By: xT-Zealot [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2002 09:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is cool! I like this fic! |
Reviewed By: akira On: June 21, 2002 11:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's the best story i ever read.
pleas keep going. |
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