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| "The Ones They Take For Granted" Reviews/Comments [ 97 ] | | Pages (7): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 › » ] | Title: ....?
Reviewed By: fusionHA [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2003 11:21 EST
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Unfortunately, I've lost ALL interest in DBZ. Completely. But somehow I'm still anxiously anticipating the end of this fic. It's the very verylast one I'm holding out on, and I really hope you intend to write the end of it someday. Hell, I've even abandoned my own epic at this point (shame on me), but this is more than worth waiting for. It's been (hands down) the best fanfiction I've ever read. And you're so close to the end. Nnnn.... But if you truly don't intend on writing the last chapter for whatever reason (I can understand), is there anyway you could at least tell me what happens. lol I won't tell anyone else. It's just that you left us on a cliff hanger and I would really love to know how everything turns out before I give up completely. Please... I beg of you... don't leave me in limbo forever :( You can mail me at fusionforbreakfast@yahoo.com anytime... Do you take bribes? I can draw.
| Reviewed By: Daniel Rodriguez [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2003 13:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, this is great!! I just read all chapters, and they were excellent! I like the POV of both Goku and Videl, and I love the pairing very much! I like pairings that have Goku with any woman besides Chi Chi. I really don't like her. In ant case, I give Goku and Videl my full support on this one! Also, Goku, please listen up here. Instead of following on what is for the families on Earth, follow your heart. You have been too considerate of other people's feelings and emotions. Although I find it a real rare and good quality, you really need to think and act with your own feelings. Trust me, go with your heart and feelings. Tell Videl that you love her. Believe me, ChiChi never showed you much love at all. In fact, I think the only reason she even "loved" you from the start was so she could have a child. After that, you were a little more then a shadow to her. Videl, on the other hand, is the one for you. She is like you, in many ways! She knows on how it is like being not loved, was naive like you when you two were both young, and also wise and thoughtful towards others. Goku, please go to her. Even if everyone hates you and Videl for being together, it doesn't matter! You have each other, and that is all you two ever need. I give both of you my blessings and respect. Goku, you have always been my favorite warrior and Z-fighter! I hope to see you guys at your wedding! Hahaha! I also hope you have twins; a son and a daughter! In any case, excellent story here! I hope you update soon! Keep it up!
| Reviewed By: Nikki17 On: October 14, 2003 14:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! I fell in love with this story when I was bored one day and started looking for alternate pairings in the DBZ/DBGT world. I found it on this one website which only had a link to the first seven chapters. I knew there had to be more so I went in search to find if another website that had your story too. My search led me here where I was able to continue reading the rest of the story! You are truly a gifted writer, utterly amazing. This story is very intriguing and awesome. I feel for them so much it drives me crazy. I do hope you are able to finish the story, I would very much like to find out how everything turns out. Even though I dread and know that its impossible for them to be together. I would still like to have completion to the story. I just wanted to encourage you to continue on with the remainder of the story. And to commend you on your extraordinary ability to write. Thank you for writing this story, I enjoyed reading so very much.
| Reviewed By: dbzobsessed On: July 13, 2003 16:24 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As you already know I loved this chapter...your interpetation of Goku and Vegeta are superb. I wish the series would have show this side of Goku, cuz I really believe this is the truth behind his persona. Short or long, it really doesn't matter on chapter length as long as you continue writing...that's all that matters. You know the rest. Thanks for updating and for sharing.... | Reviewed By: cursed_jax [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2003 04:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh god come on we need that next chapter don't leave me hanging here ahhhhh i need to know what happens come on goku and videl need to get together, sure i'm a great fan of gohan but this fic has to have goku and videl together come on please i'm begging you hurry up with the fic and get those two together hurry please lol and all of thoes people are right your an excellent excellent writer and your description of goku is more then wonderful but can't wait for the next chapter please hurry!!!!!!! | Reviewed By: fusionHA [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2003 17:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh...
I can't even begin to tell you what you're doing to me with this. I... Oh god, I honestly don't know where to start here! This story is so fucking incredible, I'm just about speachless here trying to think of a review to give you.
First off, your characterization of Goku is so dead on to fitting into the canon, I can't believe what I'm reading sometimes. I haven't looked at his character the same way since I read the first chapter of your story, and you've made him into something soooooo much mmore then what I once thought was just a one-dimentioal character of a one-dimentional cartoon. The life and realism you add to him is amazing, and there's not much more I can say about that. I only hope I can be as descriptive and insightful with MY characters as you have been with even half of Goku.
Secondly, you're representation of Vegeta in this chapter (and every other chapter for that matter) has been the definitive version of how I think he should be written ever since I started reading this. It's fucking perfect! I can't (CAN'T!!) stand the way Vegeta is portrayed everwhere else, whether he's the main character or not, since you have finally made him into someone believeable and REALISTIC to who he actually is! You've managed to add more in the depth and character development for him with every word or action he makes, that some fics can't even accomplish in 100,000 words! I'm truly impressed with how you write him! Everywhere else, "Emotional Vegeta" is completely OOC and feels totally wrong.
And finally, to thank you - for inspiring me to write the way I do. I've been so inspired by the effect of your writing, I have used you as my sole inspiration with my current project. I haven't created a work of art like "Granted", but I have tried to create that sense of realism and story development through the eyes of the character as you have, since I now know how rewarding it is to read such detail in characters you thought you already read everything about. It's also not nearly as original in it's pairing as yours is, but I have done everything I can to follow your lead for storytelling in such a dramatic way.
I can't believe that this story is almost over! Unlike anything else I've ever read, I DON'T want this one to end. You wow me everytime. Not to mention how this is one of only three fics I still follow anymore and I will miss talking about it with other readers of "Granted" and wondering what will happen next. But I hope, more than anything, that we'll have a happy ending to read. And yeah, yeah, I know - either way it ends will be sad. But you know what I mean.
Please don't leave us waiting too long.... but at least long enough so I can read read the whole story again from the beginning for the 5th time ^_^ ... so tomorrow then, right? lol
Keep up the incredible work!
You inspire me.
djFusion | Reviewed By: Vegeta Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2003 00:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter was well worth the wait for! I knew there was a reason that your my favourite author ^_^
This chapter was great - I loved how deeply emotional alll Goku's thoughts were. I htink I also liked Vegeta's character in this chaptera lot too. You have all te characters down well but the interplay between Goku and Vegeta was really well written! Go you! You fantastic writer you! | Reviewed By: Kichi On: July 09, 2003 09:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic, i don't care about the short chapters anymore as long as a chapter comes out, I'm happy. and i know this isn't going to end happily but it doen't stop me from hoping! | Reviewed By: Goku's Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2003 01:31 EDT
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Loved it!
It always makes me happy when ya update!
... don't know what else to say.... | Reviewed By: Mistress Vejita On: July 08, 2003 20:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THANKYOU, THANKYOU, THANKYOU!!! *is doin' the happy dance* I was so excited when I saw the E-mail update. I think I scared the hell outta my family when I just, all of a sudden, jumped up from the 'puter and shouted "WHOOHOO!" really loud. *sheepish grin*... This was awesome, beta or not! I'm just so happy you put this up! ^_^ Ghods, this whole fic is awesome! The emotion and intensity are just incredible. You've kept the charactres very real as well and I am so hopelessly in love with Goku this way. He's soo hot! *drools all over Goku* You've made Vejita really cool too. What can I say? I'm at your feet... ::family is STILL looking at me very strangely:: ^_^ Till next time, Ja... | Reviewed By: Zorella On: July 08, 2003 17:38 EDT
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Oohh... yay! I love this story ^_^
There are so many possibilities with the ending.. they could all be blown appart when Goku's ship malfunctions and explodes, or a rare disease could turn them all into zombies.. or Goku could just not leave, Chi Chi could die from a heart attack and Gohan could get amnesia :D | Reviewed By: AMCM74 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2003 01:00 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I cant say how delighted I was when I heard you had updated! As always love the fic, your Goku is always so powerful and emotional. Of course I adore that! Until next update. | Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2003 23:35 EDT
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Great insight into Videl and realistic feelings regarding their married life. How can he expect things to just go on like always? And doesn't he realize that they way it was wasn't working? Poor Videl. I really feel for her. Looking forward to Goku's POV next chapter. :) | Reviewed By: Shade_Knight_A [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2003 13:54 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hum what does Gohan have in mind. If I go by the male point of veiw. The quike fix way of things. I would just go to the Dragon and wish for a second chance to keep from messing up my Marriage. And my old author spirt with my twists and turns would have Gohan find the Dragonballs and atempt to make the wish to restore his Marriage only to find out that he has already made that wish once before.
Musical selection for the next Chapter: "Love is a Battlefield" by Pat Benatar
Sense Videl mentioned it the song has been stuck in my head lol. Great chapter. And I do like the longer chapters and if it is doesn't make a differance in the time between updates then yes.
Shade_knight@msn.com | Reviewed By: SSJ Courtney On: April 10, 2003 16:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the best fic ever! I love it! | | Pages (7): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 › » ] |
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