| "The Ones They Take For Granted" Reviews/Comments [ 97 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kichi On: April 08, 2003 09:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes, I love this fic, but after the wiat for each chapte you better believe that i want it to be longer! And if you want to stick to one POV for each chapter that's you decision but i always liked them going back and forth because right now i'm really wanting to know what Goku's thinking. |
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 23:39 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There's a lump in my throat, Pareathe. This is so sad. Of course, it's always touching when the dipstick... I mean guy wants to make things work out. And I really understand Videl's need to make things as easy on her daughter as possible.
But crap - we're talking about Goku here, folks! The opportunity to be stuck in space in a little spaceship with just him... well, need I say more? ;-)
Please, Pareathe, make it a happy ending... |
Reviewed By: dbz obsessed On: April 06, 2003 21:46 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry I didn't review sooner. This was such a touching chapter with Videl so concerned about Pan. But why is Gohan so clueless especially for such a smart guy? I know Goku wasn't in this chapter but you have to think about all he is going thru right now before he leaves. And yes, Pan better get to see Goku before he leaves. Is he really leaving? Oh, on the matter of long chapters...I take all I can get an soon as I can get it, so if your friend says your chapters are too long, suggest to her to set aside a part of it and read it later cuz the rest of this fan wants to find out what is going to happen unless that lengthens this time it takes to post. Then post sooner and shorter. |
Reviewed By: Calendar On: April 06, 2003 21:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow... I love this fanfic so much... I can't believe you updated! I've been hoping you would, and have been checking every day for the past few weeks. (I actually read this chapter the day it came out, but I couldn't review it because I was at school and the review section was blocked off.)
I'd've liked to have that longer chapter, but I suppose I'll have to be satisfied with what I've got, eh? Really, I want a conclusion! Videl and Goku need to end up together and live happily ever after... but you bring up very good points from a writer's point of view.
"And what about Chichi? I know she doesn’t qualify for wife of the year, but I’m sure she loves Goku in her own way. How would she handle it if she knew her husband had an affair with her own daughter-in-law?"
VERY good point, and something an IC Videl would worry about, as well as the following paragraphs about Pan. Stunning writing, there. But I still can't hope but wish that she realizes that pain is relative. Chichi would be devastated, but what about when Goku leaves? She won't have him anyway, and if Goku stayed, he'd be unhappy. But you'll deal with that in your own way, I'm sure. I hope to see the conclusion soon...? *begs*
Anyway, I'll end this now! Wonderful chapter to an amazing story! ^-^ |
Reviewed By: fusionHA [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 12:49 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
DAMNIT! I'm so hooked on this fic it's sick! I LOVE the characterization and it's a brilliant way of developing Videl, Gohan and Goku. Like I've said before, this is fucking amazing and I will hunt you down like a dog if you make us wait five more months for the next update again ^_^
I admire you as a writer and as an inspiration and I think you have more talent than you know what to do with! ^_^ Please write the end of this before I jump out a window and I will be waiting anxiously for the next chapter!
~djFusion |
Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 05:29 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, that was so worth the wait!! Huh, Goku was only mentioned, and still I fell in love with him again... *sighs dreamily*... I didn't feel cheated by the short chapter, I enjoyed the long ones, but everything seemed to fit, and the end felt natural. I'm really looking forward to the next one - whenever it's ready to come out! Things this good are ALWAYS worth taking time over. |
Reviewed By: zorella On: April 04, 2003 03:55 EST
Comment/Review:
ahhhh...I none of the authors I'm following have updated for months, so you made my day Pareathe :D I was worth the wait.
As for chapter lenghts, personally I like long chapters, but it depends on the story. I think that a combination between this chappy length and your previous ones will keep everyone happy ;) |
Reviewed By: Meggie On: April 04, 2003 03:47 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You...absolutely...RULE! :D please update soon |
Reviewed By: Vegeta Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2003 23:41 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. This was a really beautiful chapter! I almost cried. Poor Videl, I feel for her...I don't see how anyone could not feel for her.
You're my favourite author now. I swear it, you're writing is so creative and original it takes my breath away! |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2003 23:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I swear these ratings need to go higher than 10!! Obviously, the originality of this fic needs a rating of 100 or more!!
I'm sure you know this, Pareathe, but this is the ONLY het fic left in my top fics of all time!! LOL Only YOU could make me love something so much that isn't yaoi!!
This chapter was wonderful, although I must admit that I LOVED your long chapters!! But beggars can't be choosers, I'll take ANYTHING I can get, even if it's only a page or two!! ^.^
Poor Videl, she must be devastated that Goku is leaving. I usually love Gohan, but damn is he clueless in this fic! I just wanna bitch slap some sense into him!! Pan is wonderful (although I usually hate HER!), and I like how you have given her so much maturity at age 10, and aren't making her a clueless little airhead, like she (and Bra both) are written so often. I'm anxious to read what happens "tomorrow"!! ^.^ |
Reviewed By: Sarah aka Vega On: March 14, 2003 10:55 EST
Comment/Review:
I absolutely LOVE this fic. I love it love it love it. Please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: hitomi On: February 17, 2003 16:32 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the story and the lemon scenes are off the wall. Just want a happy ending for Videl and Goku! Please update soon. |
Reviewed By: Mimi H. On: February 17, 2003 15:50 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story just kicks ass! The plot is really amazing and I like how you've made Goku more than the brainless cartoon character you see in the series. Though the pairing is totally different, it's so well written I can actualy see it and like it. Update soon. |
Reviewed By: Stan the MAN On: January 21, 2003 21:41 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love this story. I'm a huge fan of Videl and like alternative pairings if they're well written. |
Reviewed By: Zorella [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2003 19:19 EST
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update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update.... please? Your driving me nuts! What happens!!!!! @_@ |
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