| "The Ones They Take For Granted" Reviews/Comments [ 97 ] |
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Reviewed By: Arashi Lioncourt [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2002 16:35 EST
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For some reason, most probably the way you write ;), the emotion in this fic just sucks me in every time I read a chapter and the rest comes flooding back. Referring to the way Vegeta speaks as 'Vegeta Standard' was highly amusing. Also, your portrayal of his thoughts toward what Goku is going to do are an excellent insight into his character. It makes me wonder what your thougts are when you write him into this fic. Even more, I wonder about how you think Vegeta feels toward Gohan in this fic, and why he feels that way.
Having Videl talk to Bulma was nice, I thought. Especially when she talked to Bulma about Goku's promise to her, and then the explanation of why he stayed away after Cell. Tied in with that, Bulma's words to Goku when she saw him later rang very true according to your portrayal of Goku's character. It seems that, for Goku, the hardest decisions often seemed to be the best at the moment and often were , but still, hindsight is always clearer. Sadly, if he leaves, I fear that will be the case again. Baka Saiyans.
I feel so badly for Videl. Her reaction to the events on the security camera will be very interesting. Oddly enough, I feel bad for not feeling worse for Gohan. I do feel bad for him...but at the same time I can't help but think that Goku is so much more deserving. I still hope Goku stays with her in the end. Call me slow, but I still don't know who you are going to have her end up with, I just hope it works out for her. |
Reviewed By: W-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2002 09:19 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!
Why did you end the chapter like that?!?! I can't stand the suspense. I must know what happens now! *Sobs and runs from the room* |
Reviewed By: Zorella [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2002 23:39 EST
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Whaaaa! Don't make him leave!!!! whaa!!! you big meanie! :P |
Reviewed By: Arashi Lioncourt [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2002 12:07 EDT
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The first thing I simply must say is that I love Vegeta. You have done an excellent job of portraying the mystery and cunning intellect of the saiyan no ouji. Secondly, it seems a rather obvious statement to make given the pairing of this fic, but I love Goku with Videl, thank you very much. After part seven I was willing to give Gohan a chance. After part eight I am going to start crying if that happens and Goku truly gives Videl up. Wonderful, realistic, heart-wrenching complication. Domo arigato, Pareathe-san. |
Reviewed By: Vegeta Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2002 04:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow...this chapter is sooo good! I mean really, really good! I'm liking everything about this fic so far, espeically the way your writing the characters.
I cannot wait for the next chapter ^_^ |
Reviewed By: autumn On: August 16, 2002 20:41 EDT
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Oh my gosh... this was such a sad chapter. *sniff* So much emotion. And the scene with Gohan & Videl talking was amazing. I also liked Videl crying in the backyard and the moment's hesitation that resulted in Goku being the one to bring her inside. It shows that you take great care in walking through your characters' actions and dialogue because it is so real that it pulls you into the story. Can't wait to see what happens next. |
Reviewed By: W-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2002 15:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please tell me this isn't the end?!?! *Runs off wailing* |
Reviewed By: autumn On: July 21, 2002 14:22 EDT
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That was intense!! Great choice of characters to include in this chapter btw. Piccolo's & Vegeta's presence really added to the drama.
The last line was excellent and heartbreaking: "I’ve died twice, but as we step onto our joint lawn and her hand hesitantly lets go of mine, it’s the first time I‘ve ever actually felt dead."
Great stuff! |
Reviewed By: Zorella [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2002 16:19 EDT
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whaaaaa!!!!!!!!! omg, that was sooo good, and yet another cliff hanger, not as bad as that last one mind you ^-^ but still :sighs: it's not fair. Oh well, guess I'll have to wait with everyone else now uh? |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2002 11:55 EDT
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This was great! Will Videl and Goku stay a couple, will Chi Chi continue to be a bitch! ANSWER ME! |
Reviewed By: Meiyume On: July 20, 2002 08:01 EDT
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*Sigh* Did you know I've been checking everday since the last update to see if you've updated? Anyway, I have a demand and it's the only demand I will make, YOU HAVE TO MAKE SURE THAT THEY END UP TOGETHER if they don't...omg! I mean, I know I would stay with him and yeah...no matter the consequences. Ah...well...update soon, I hate cliffhangers... |
Reviewed By: SaiyaSith [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2002 01:28 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh NO! How could it end there?? **sigh**
They deserve happiness! Can Goku EVER have happiness???
I've been rereading the manga, and from what I've seen, ChiChi has never at ANY point loved Goku...Gohan yes, but Goku no. The saviour of the universe deserves better!
**grin** you should be proud! it takes a lot to get me emotionally involved with a chapter! INCREDIBLE AWESOME FANTASTIC JOB GIRL! |
Reviewed By: Sam On: July 17, 2002 22:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are so evil?! Please write more. I'm dieing to know whats going to happen. And it seems to me that Gohan is having a little affair himself(seems to like work alot;).Please update soon. |
Reviewed By: Sephira On: July 13, 2002 03:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it. Very honestly i loved everything about it. I've always loved Goku, but you've given him new dimentions....pleeeeeze hurry with the next chapter, cuz that was one bitch of a cliffhanger! |
Reviewed By: autumn On: July 08, 2002 13:44 EDT
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Oh, great, what a place to leave it, my heart is racing! :) Fabulous chapter. It was a great turning point in their relationship (in more ways than one!), I really liked the
emotion you built in to it. Especially from Videl’s point of view, because I think we’ve known that what Goku feels is real, and we feel sorry for his predicament. But knowing
she feels the same way is just … aah!!
I have to say, too, that I know this affair makes Goku into such a bad father, even moreso than just being a cheating husband. But I think you have done a very good job of
showing how horrible he really does feel about it, and what type of person that makes him and how disappointed he is in himself. And yet he can’t help it, I guess that’s how it
is when someone else has something that you need. Not that he’ll be able to make Gohan understand… Please hurry soon with the next chapter :) |
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