| "The Ones They Take For Granted" Reviews/Comments [ 97 ] |
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Reviewed By: SaiyaSith [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2002 00:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh total WOW!!!
I am amazed...cliff-hung...totally on the edge of my seat by that ending! All I can say is this has GOT to work out for them! Somehow make them happy!
I sit amazed!
YOU ROCK! |
Reviewed By: Vegeta Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2002 23:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My God this is getting good! They finally admitted that they love each other...and now Gohans found out! Wow!
I love this story so much and I cannot believe, at all, how much I want to read the next chapter! I hope you get it out soon because this is quickly becomming my favourite fic.
I cannot wait to see what happens!
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Reviewed By: EmberMaxximus [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2002 23:04 EDT
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Cliffhanger...hn...you weren't joking, huh? I'm anxious to see how Mr. Prim & Proper reacts to what's been going on under his nose. Well, I can't wait 'til the shit hits the fan in the next chapter. Don't keep us waiting too long. ~_^ |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2002 19:29 EDT
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This chapter was great! When will Goku and Videl come out with their love for each other in front of the others? Will Gohan attempt to kill Goku out of shear rage? ANSWER ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 |
Reviewed By: DD On: July 05, 2002 19:59 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh sweet Kami P! Why is the next chapter not up? NOW?!!!! Oh my god, the whole chapter was mindblowingly good, and to finish it like that. *grabs ICV by the shirt collar and begins shaking him viciously* Whats going to happen?!!!! AAAaaaaah!!! I can't wait for more, more, MORE! *deep breath* Okay, ASIDE from that fantastically amazing, and incredibly evil, cliffhanger the chapter was, for me, as good as all the ones that have come before it, if not better. The emotions of Videl and Goku are so raw and real in this story. You can literally feel lust and the longing between the characters, as if they are both the most special people
in the world to each other. And in this chapter you showed that this really was how they felt. Almost to the point of them telling each other directly. The sex scene was wonderul, what a clever idea to have Goku going super saiyan! Videl is one lucky lady, thats all I've gotta say... Or maybe not, seeing as how GOHAN HAS JUST CAUGHT THEM!!!! I'm dying to see how you're going to handle this tricky turn of events, and will be bugging you for a sneak peek! lol Also, the Celine Dion song was extremely fitting for the chapter, and some of the lyrics were very beautiful. Thumbs up, gold star, A+ and 110%. Thanks for writing hon! DD |
Reviewed By: Meiyume On: July 05, 2002 19:07 EDT
Comment/Review:
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!! OMG OMG OMG!!!!!! :) I LOVE THIS STORY! Aren't you falling in love with Goku more and more while writing this?! I know I'm falling in love with him more and more while reading it! Might I add how EVIL you are for leaving the story there?!?!?! HMMM?!?! I swear I will hunt you down and then find your computer and steal all the notes and ideas for this story you have so I can read them....MWAHAHAHAA...*ahem* anyway update soon! |
Reviewed By: DemonQueen17 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2002 19:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've done it again. Very exciting chapter. Goku is one of the sexiest characters in the series. I'd love to read more soon. |
Reviewed By: Zorella [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2002 10:11 EDT
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nonononnonononononnooononoo!!!!!!!!! I have never, ever been left with a cliff hanger like that! OMG!!!! That was amazing! I'm speachless... usually I've got a whole bunch of things to review but this....wow... This story is immediatly going on the fav list.... |
Reviewed By: Sereniti On: July 05, 2002 05:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg omg omg....you left me hanging so badly I wanna cry -waaaails- LOL So unfair, this is torture!! Write quickly PLEASE! I beg of you!! |
Reviewed By: EmberMaxximus [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2002 16:41 EDT
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Wow! I'm really enjoying this. I found it at the Lemon Stand and had a fit when I clicked on ch4 and recieved a 440msg, so I tracked it down here and I just really like this story. I ususally don't read odd pairing, but I started reading this piece and I couldn't stop, needless to say I spent my day off hunkered in front of the puter neglecting my housework and my own fics.
I can't wait for the next chapter...~EM |
Reviewed By: DD On: June 29, 2002 02:04 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, as usual, I loved it. Absolutely loved it. Goku is such a sly one, STILL at it, after all this time!! Though of course it is understandable, love and lust, but still, what a situation. Thats his son for Kami's sake! I enjoyed the turmoil he felt about that this chappie (sorry Goku!) Can't wait to see if Gohan's going to find out, and what will happen if he does. Also, my fave bit (can ya guess ^.^ ) was the scene with Vegeta. How you can write both Goku and Vegeta with so much character, likeness and respect really impresses me :) Veggie was so in character, loved his sarcastic wise little comments. He was awesome! And when he said the bit about Kakarot's woman not his mate - o.o I just about screamed!!! Nice writing there. Can't wait for more! Wonderful fic |
Reviewed By: gokusgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2002 23:40 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please hurry with chpater five before I piss my pants! :) |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2002 13:25 EDT
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Please update this soon. I really like this. :) |
Reviewed By: Meiyume On: June 17, 2002 01:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
id give you an eleven but theres none! heh...i love that you update so quickly...*touches wood* heh...well till next time! |
Reviewed By: autumn On: October 10, 2002 21:00 EDT
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Oh my gosh. What can I say, I absolutely love the emotions in this story! I was totally shocked when Goku spilled the beans to ChiChi and again in awe when it all came crashing down for Videl. Whew! The buildup to both of those events was amazingly well done and yet still not totally expected. I'm interested to see the advice that Bulma has to offer. The flashback of the fight with Gohan was a great way to show us what's going on with him and I look forward to seeing more of him in the next part. And as usual I think you've utilized Vegeta as a great supporting character. All in all, well worth the wait. :) |
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