| "Of Dog Gods & Mortals (new version)" Reviews/Comments [ 91 ] |
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Reviewed By: LadyCash [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2007 04:47 EST
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The more you write, the more I remember. Nice chapter. A few spelling/word problems. Should be naivete, and 'buying time' should be 'biding her time'. Otherwise, very nice. Will be interesting to see how Kikyo handles IY's proposal of library duties, will she be able to hold in her temper? Or will this be the act that leads her to betrayal? (Cause I'm sure it's coming!) Glad that the IY/Kag relationship isn't being rushed, too much, too soon, can be a bad thing, sometimes. But we'll see how you handle it. Will they spend weeks holding hands/kissing/cuddling, or jump each other in a mad passion? Hmmmm, now that I think on it, either would work! Anyways, yay for 2 chapters at once, looking forward to more.
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Reviewed By: LadyCash [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2007 04:30 EST
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Well shoot, girl! No sooner than I finish one chapter, give a review, and return to my email to delete the notice, than you have a new chapter up. Go you!
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Reviewed By: LadyCash [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2007 04:28 EST
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Busy chapter! While it's good that Kikyo got her scolding, I'm sure it will only lead to more mischief. Of course, that's what makes a story good, eh? Glad to see Kagome meet her family again, and how she and IY are 'crushing' on each other, secretly. Time will deepen the feelings, and make it harder to resist and hide them. Will be nice to see how they work through the difficulties b/t them, and find a way to show their feelings.
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Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2007 01:09 EST
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I am so very glad to see this story back. I loved the Egyptian version, and can't imagine why there were complaints. I love both Greek and Egyptian mythology, so either one seems like a wonderful setting for a story to me. And except for the prologue, there seem to very few changes to the overall story. That being said, if you are wanting it to be set in Greece instead of Egypt there are a few things you might want to change... and these are truly the most minor of nitpickings. In the prologue, you call it a "parody of ancient Greece", I think you probably meant inspired by, since technically a parody is comedic and satirical in nature. In Chapter 1, Inuyasha is wearing an open vest and leather pants. I am certain our beloved hanyou looks absolutely delicious dressed like this, but other than Kevin Sorbo's Hercules, most ancient Greek men did not wear pants, for the same reason that the Egyptian men did not... its just too dang hot! Besides this gives an opportunity to look up his tunic (chiton) or toga/cloak (himation), or at the very least show off his legs. In chapter 3, there is a reference to farming only being possible along the banks of the river and that they live in a desert country. Greece while arid, gets far more rain than Egypt and has much more fertile land. Also they rely heavily on fishing and other mariner activities like trade (and conquest). Please understand these comments are not meant to hinder your creative process in any way. And I really do love the story.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2007 06:56 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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omg you change the story... who the hell complained!?!
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Reviewed By: KagomeAkane [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 20:41 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the concept! I'm a big fan of Greek mythology and I think the story you're writing sticks pretty well with the time concept as well. Keep it up and please for the love of Kami update soon ^-^ KagomeAkane
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Reviewed By: Chimeara [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 18:55 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i havent read the first version of the story but so far it looks amazing like all your other works... and if i may ask... are there any copies of the older story? it dosent sound bad at all judging(Sp?) from the reviews.
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Reviewed By: Alliecoolgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 17:19 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I don't see how anyone could complain about the first version of this, they must've had problems(Looney people). Anyway, please keep updateing!!!
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Reviewed By: inufan987 On: November 24, 2007 17:11 EST
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i'm so glad that you brought this story back. a few spelling errors here and there, but great story nonetheless! keep writing. can't wait for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: FayeMegan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 13:07 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay. I loved this story the first time I read it, I hope you update soon!!~
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Reviewed By: Alotta Profit [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 11:56 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't see why anyone complained about this, because I personally found it as a good read. I was sad when it disappeared but I found it this morning and the world was right again.
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Reviewed By: LadyCash [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 05:05 EST
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Glad to see this back, and any 'kinks' removed. A few spelling errors, but nothing major. Looking forward to more!
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Reviewed By: ji-an [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 05:05 EST
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hmm, I can see the changes. I'm so happy that this story still exists, I was very upset when it sudenly vanished from my favorites list. Anyway, I'm curious, who complained and why? Want me to sock them one for you? Why the transition from Egypt to Greece? I can kind of understand, since women were not as equal in greek society as they were with their egyptian counterpart. Aw well. Looking forward to more! I'm loving it!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 04:14 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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glad that this story is back... really like it so far... the original seemed okay to me too... but anyway looking forward to your upcoming chapters... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: Jessie Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 02:10 EST
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I was very sad when the original was removed. I was really really enjoying the story and found it rather refreshing to what was out there. I'm glad you decided to re-post and 'revamp' a bit, even though I thought it was ok the way that it was. I look forward to reading this story again (and by the way... I love all your other titles :D)
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