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| "Reprisal" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Aisuru Hito On: August 02, 2025 12:48 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good oneshot, but I think it has so much potential for a
multi-chaptered story. The implication that Yugi even remotely was
in the know that Jou and Honda doing this might happen, Malik's
recovery from it, Jou and Honda being served justice for doing
this, and how this would break the friend group Yugi is at the
center of because you know it definitely would even if they
eventually ended up coming back together. You had Jou change his
mind way too late here. He stood by while Malik was forced to
perform oral on Honda and then he himself performed anal on Malik
until he came inside him. None of that is stuff he can ever take
back. He and Honda cannot give Malik back his virginity and
dignity. Being sorry about it after the fact is pointless.
Insulting even. I know this oneshot is ancient and you probably
aren't writing anymore, but I hope that if you still are or even if
you aren't but you see this somehow, you'll consider doing a
continuation to this oneshot.
| Title: Reprisal
Reviewed By: mystralwind [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2008 21:21 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, you made me cry for him too. Poor Malik. It was very creative and well done.
| Title: Refreshing
Reviewed By: mylittleunderground [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2008 16:42 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent. You combined conventional Japanese living with bloodthirsty Yuugi-tachi revenge. I feel like I'm reading a doujinshi story (only without the pictures obviously). I'm also glad Jounouchi isn't totally evil. Instead, I'm glad you kept part of his true character. This story makes you kind of wonder about Malik too, because it makes you wonder if he really deserved it or not. In all, it was a very well written and refreshing story.
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