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| "Fleeting" Reviews/Comments [ 42 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] | Title: *glee*
Reviewed By: psyco_chick32 (not signed in, whoops!) On: November 04, 2009 18:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*squee* Better late than never, right? So sorry for the late response to this AWESOME chapter that I have been ABSOLUTELY DYING FOR! I was sooooo happy with this chapter like you cannot even imagine. All the characters are so beautifully expressed - Sesshoumaru's coldness, InuYasha's hesitancy in some matters and open-heartedness in others, and Kagome's willingness to listen to him even after everything that's happened... This is love, baby (and how DARE YOU MAKE ME LOVE A S/K FIC! *flails*) Kagome's attitude about the whole thing - finding neutral territory, trying to facilitate InuYasha's need to speak with his brother no matter how much he's been blown off - is so incredibly both in-character canonically AND fits well into the stronger Kagome you've rounded out a bit for this fic (as is generally necessary in an AU, of course). It's a beautiful blending of the two - you help her stand on her own without losing what makes her intrinsically her and I love it. *snickers* And of COURSE InuYasha would show up when he did - it'd have to be then, and not a moment earlier or later, because that's just the way he is (both in this world and canonically - which, again, you capture so beautifully I'm so damn jellus). The description of Sesshoumaru's growth from irritation to full-blown anger and Kagome's ability to differentiate the two was really well-played as well; well-written and a nice look at how close the two are growing. I always say it's a sign that my husband and I are close enough that he just knows when not to talk to me before I even open my mouth and that's something that's growing between Kagome and Sesshoumaru. Now - on to what I know you've been waiting for: MY REACTION TO INUYASHA OMG THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU! \o/ When I read InuYasha's true motivations, I wanted to sing. I wanted to carve a statue of you out of butter. I wanted to cry tears of joy. I have remained firm in my stance that you would not make my boy the OMG-evil-one he always ends up as in SK fics and you have validated my hopes and dreams for this ^_^ I knew you wouldn't let me down!! I feel so awful for him, too - poor guy. He's been raised with his father as this elusive, amazing man. Raised to believe that his father could do no wrong, was fabulous, and then to face reality is so painful. I almost actually cried at his admission - he wants to go home, he wants to be with people who love him and care about him. Again, the beautiful blending of AU and Canon InuYasha - the searching for his place, the uncertainty of where he stands, makes this such a masterful piece and guarantees that it will remain among my favorites. *cheers* And I'm so excited to see what happens now... how will Kagome get the two to see eye-to-eye in order to face their father's scheme? Can the three pull it off? What could it mean for the future of the companies? This is so incredibly amazing... and it's a story about COMPANIES. And it's SK. I don't know how you've gotten me so absolutely obsessed but whatever it is, it's amazing.
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2009 14:34 PDT
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Congratulations! Your story has been nominated by the Inuyasha FanGuild for Best AU/AR and Best Romance (Other) for the Second Quarter of 2009. If you would like to track the progress of your story through the voting process, or simply find out more about the IYFG and perhaps join yourself, you can find everything you need to know on our website: www.inuyashafanguild.com (Inuyasha Fan Guild dot com) If you have any other questions, don't hesitate to contact our moderators at IYFGModerator@gmail.com (IYFG Moderator at g mail dot com). Congratulations again! -- IYFG Beta Group
| Reviewed By: Lady Sianna [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2009 18:40 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I came across this story when I was looking through the Inuyasha Fan Guild nominations, and I can clearly see why it was nominated there!! The story is so engaging and interesting, well written and complexed! I find myself questioning Inuyasha's motives even now. I wonder if his father has something over him, and that's why he was so willing to act as his pawn, or if he is doing it of his own accord. I nearly screamed in outrage when he sent that "Checkmate" memo to Sesshoumaru! All I could think was, "That sneaky little bastard!!!" I am really interested in seeing more of this. I am a terribly picky reader, yet this has thoroughly drawn me in! Keep up the fantastic job on this and please update as soon as time and opportunity will permit! ~Sianna
| Reviewed By: Raeko [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2009 20:09 PDT
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I've been reading your fic in spurts, several chapters at a time, but I've been a bad reader and haven't reviewed yet. >.< Sorry about that. Today I had to say something, though, even if it was just "good job." I've truly enjoyed this. There have been times when I really wanted them to just spit everything out and come together, but I'm glad you're in charge of the story and not me. I hate it when fics are dragged out unnecessarily, but this is a purposeful dragging-out. They aren't people who can automatically understand each other--Sesshoumaru for obvious reasons, but even Kagome isn't only what she appears on the surface--and you're giving them time to figure each other out. I really do appreciate that. I cheered a little on the inside when Sesshoumaru shot down his father's forgone conclusion! And I had a sneaking suspicion that Inuyasha really was still working for his father when he made up with Kagome. I don't really know what to think about his character, though. He may actually like her in addition to any other motives, and he's pretty obviously out to win his father's approval, but is that enough to redeem him when he's doing what Sesshoumaru refused to do? I'm looking forward to future updates, and in the meantime I'll continue to ponder. Cheers!
| Reviewed By: kmoaton [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2009 13:30 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sesshomaru finally standing up to his father, what an interesting turn of events! I totally enjoyed this addition. I can't help but wonder what is going through Inuyasha's mind as he listens to his father and Sesshomaru talk. I liked the idea of Sesshomaru not allowing his father to bribe him with the carrot and possibly completely destroying his renewing relationship with Kagome. At the same time, one can't help but wonder what else does Dad have up his sleeve. Excellent!!!
| Title: Another Sunday
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2009 14:15 PDT
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Well finally! It took these two long enough to admit to one another that they truly want one another. I am getting a bad feeling from Inuyasha here. I don't think he's a bad guy, but I get the sense that Sesshomaru might be right---his father told him to do this. If not, Inuyasha's just taking after the old man and playing games with Kagome to get back at his brother. Either way, he had better be careful. I don't think Kagome will forgive him a second time if that's the case. It just seems rather odd that after socially shunning her Inuyasha suddenly wants to pay so much attention to her again. I'd be as suspicious of him as Sesshomaru is if I were Kagome. I also understand why he's disappointed in her. She had moved on from these types of people for a long period, and I think it made her behave much better. It almost seems that since she feels she can't truly have Sesshomaru she's willing to surround herself with popular people to fill the void. These two are in serious need of a long talk, one where they simply state what they want and how to get it. It's too bad that he's so stubborn and won't go after her due to his pursuit of his studies. And I'm also not surprised that Sesshomaru has a warning for Inuyasha when it comes to Kagome. He knows his half-brother well enough to know that Inuyasha isn't going to respect Kagome any better than Koga did. I attribute that to Inuyasha's age here, too. I do like that Kagome gets upset with Inuyasha for inviting way too many people and then going to Sesshomaru to apologize. Inuyasha thought he had her where he wanted her, but she still cares a lot for Sesshomaru. And again, finally, at least now they're sharing some kisses. Something tells me, though, that it won't lead to a direct conversation about their feelings--as it should. These two are so stubborn that I want to shake them for being so. They're both miserable without the other and should just fess up, unless they like being miserable, of course. I'm curious, though, how will Inuyasha react now that the girl he's been in hot pursuit of is now all over his brother again? I'd also like to compliment the use of setting here. I love the warped door. It just adds this extra touch to it that the story needed. Over all, I can't wait to see where it goes next and what happens now that Inuyasha's decided to meddle. Hopefully Kagome will follow her resolution and not fall back for the easier target. Sesshomaru's worth it, he's just a bit harder to unwrap so to speak. I'll be curious to see if she's successful or not.
| Reviewed By: SaM lA La On: May 29, 2009 16:46 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh! Man! Kagome should dump Inuyasha and leave his ass in the dust. He a lying CHEAT!! They shouldn't have ended up as friends! I would have dumped Sango as well. But anywasy GREAT writing, very creative.
| Title: If It's Sunday. . .
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2009 12:14 PDT
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Oh my. Poor Sesshomaru. Can't live with her, cant live without her. He's really put himself into a rock and a hard place, and he really has no one to blame but himself. I loved the image of him walking through the snow, something so often used in canon stories. It worked, but I liked the touch of his wool cap. I actually could see it and it didn't seem out of place. I think it's the detail that he slipped it over the tip of his ears. I like how he refuses to go home, even if he can't find a rational reason for not doing so. Ending up in the coffee house is touching, too, because the tea that he orders is more subconcious than deliberate. I suspect that if someone were to tell him that he had behaved this way that he would deny it. He misses her completely and is doing things without really thinking about it that reflect it. That's the beauty of Sesshomaru---ever deliberate and analytical, yet reactive and subconcious to things that emotional affect him. The waitress reminds him of Kagome due to her quiet kindness, seeming to know what he might need in that particular moment. The fool should stop sitting on his hands and go find Kagome. Take action in true Sesshomaru sense---before it's too late. It would seem he's going to miss the boat if he's not careful. Inuyasha has swooped in, and I have to say that I am surprised by this, somewhat. I thought it could have been Koga, as he's so stubborn and thick skulled. I could see him chasing Kagome down. It's interesting that it's Inuyasha, though, and his sweet atentions are welcome, but don't seem to entirely satisfy her, either. She's delighted and finds that it soothes her ruffled feathers, but it just seems to safe for her, the way you've presented it. Inuyasha and Kagome in canon or most Inu/Kag stories tend to have an edge about their pairing that is lacking here. He seems easier to approach than Sesshomaru, therefore easier to romance. Sesshomaru's tougher to crack and I can see her frustration being released in her exchanges with Inuyasha. I just don't see it lasting here. The edge and excitement lies with Sesshomaru and it's almost unfair to this earnest Inuyasha to say yes to dating him when they return to campus. She'll be pining for Sesshomaru and imposing him upon her date. My guess is that Kagome will realize that she hasn't simply physically ran away from Sesshomaru, she's done so emotionally, too. I also sense a fatigue on her part. She's pretty much made it clear to Sesshomaru that she's willing to "finish" it, yet he holds her at arms length for his honor's sake. That boy had better let go of some of that honor quickly. I also have a sense that a bombshell is waiting. I have no question that in this universe Inuyasha is Sesshomaru's little brother. Much like in the canon where Inuyasha receives the inheritance with little effort really, I sense that their father is handing Inuyasha a position in the company on nepotism. Not surprising, but I see dark storm clouds in the future. Until now, Sesshomaru has pretty much ignored Inuyasha as a party boy underclassman. Now he's stepping into the his territory of company and love interest. I do look forward to the fireworks I'm sure are to come!
| Title: It's Our Sunday Date!!
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2009 15:09 PDT
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Oh my. The plot has certainly thickened with this latest installment, hasn't it? Poor Sesshomaru actually realizes he is lonely and needs her, no matter what he might say aloud or what actions he might take. I love how you portray his miserable state, first through his meeting with his advisor and then him making the tea. I enjoyed the fact that you brought in him sniffing the tea and trying to conjure up memories of her being with him in the apartment. It was a nice nod to canon Sesshomaru's sense of smell while fitting AU Sesshomaru's dilemma. He has a big problem on his hands, considering that he was lucky enough to acquire an extension on his assignment, but will also have the distraction of Kagome---rather she's there or not. His actions, again, are speaking far more than his words. He's looking for her in her things, taking comfort in the fact that if her things are still there that must mean she's coming back. Even Sesshomaru needs someone, no matter how much he denies it. I enjoyed Kagome's misery almost as much. It seems her family is rather shallow. I'm not surprised that Kagome's rebelling against it, either. I'm also not surprised that she's rather unimpressed by the peacocks strutting around the ski lodge, hoping to be seen with the right people to gain advancement. As trapped as Sesshomaru is with his father's challenge, Kagome seems equally trapped with her family's social status and ideals. I like this twist on her character. Too often Kagome is the poor girl being paired with Sesshomaru (or Inuyasha in some of the AUs) and has to overcome that. From this little drabble, I get the impression that either they're rich and want to keep their name unstained or that they're not and want to appear as such. It's a wonderful device for her to fight against. She doesn't want to be superficial and worry about who she talks to or who she's seen with. She wants to be around someone genuine. I'm not surprised that her thoughts drift to him immediately and that she's miserable now that she's left him, either. She should have known better than to run, and I hope she learns this lesson, rather than repeating canon Kagome's tendencies to flee from Inuyasha. If she's serious on her intent to prove to Sesshomaru that she is not a little girl, she'll face him directly and head on. He'll respect her much more for it and they'll be brought together all that much closer for it. Something tells me that she might not have to, although I'm not going to jump to conclusions and simply assume that Sesshomaru has put two and two together and arrived at the ski resort to make some overture to her, either. It's not his style, no matter how lonely he is or how much he misses her. I suppose I'll have to wait and find out, though. She's very surprise to see this mystery person, that's for sure. If it is him, I bet he covers his real reason for being there. I do very much look forward to the next installment. Something tells me we're going to start seeing the meat of their relationship begin to bloom here. Until next Sunday, then!
| Title: The Weekly Review
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2009 19:04 PDT
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It would seem that Sundays is when I peek at your story and leave the longest review written in history. Where to start on this chapter? I love how we got into Sesshomaru's head this go round. Poor guy has such father/son issues, which isn't surprising. I think, too often, people focus too closely upon the fact that Inuyasha never knew his father and grew up alone. Sesshomaru, as the first born son, has as much pressure upon him. He is to be the successor, the heir apparent, the one to fill dear ol' dad's shoes. That's a lot of pressure for someone, and it's no wonder he's so serious and stoic. I've often thought that his behavior was all attempts to prove his worthiness to his deceased father and/or prove that he was a bigger bad ass than dear ol' dad. Here we see him trying to live up to an always disappointed father that has demanded too great of expectations of his son to inherit the family company. He works very hard and graduates early and at the top of his class, but it's just not enough. I think part of it is Sesshomaru's own mind working against himself, but from the challenge directly from his father, he's right. Makes me want to get him either really drunk and see what would happen or take him out on the town against his will just so he can loosen up. Poor thing is so overworked. And poor Kagome, getting pelted by that hail and having Koga rush in as always to her rescue. I'd rather take the hail stone and walk home alone, personally. Koga's way too overbearing and immature. I get the feeling Kagome's growing up as we go along and she's realizing exactly HOW flaky Koga is. I'm not surprised he's there with her because he perceives her to be easy. I'm hoping Kagome can read between the lines, though. Sesshomaru wants her and wants her BADLY, but he's still stuck in his own personal hell to do anything about it. It's nice to see him exert some physical dominance over a rival suitor here. Even as a modern man he can practically crush Koga's wind pipe. That's impressive. I think he deserved it, though. What a jackass to treat a girl in such a way. I'm suspecting that as time goes along, Sesshomaru won't have a choice about revealing his true feelings directly. Kagome has to learn how to read him properly. He drops hints all the time, with such a subtle flair, and you've captured that in these stories thus far expertly. I liked the fact that he noticed the peppermint tea and remembered what happened the last time it was made. I just hope he can break out of his shell and drop the anger act before she gets fed up and moves on. I have a feeling he's chased away plenty of women with the behavior. He's such a pretty one to look at, but such a difficult nut to crack. I think he should be careful, though. He's stubborn, but I think she's far more stubborn. I'll be curious to see what happens next between these two. If one of them would simply make the first move they'd finally get somewhere.
| Reviewed By: luvininu28 On: April 30, 2009 16:07 PDT
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I absolutely loved this chapter!! I could really feel with the characters instead of only for them. I really liked how you ended it and how they both felt relief to know that they could still be connected (even though only "friends") somehow. I'm so glad you updated. Thank you for making my evening a little happier!!!
| Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2009 19:31 PDT
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Somehow I couldn't help but hold my breath throughout this whole drabble. Kagome played a dangerous game with a vulnerable Sesshomaru, indeed. I love how we see him here as not the all perfect, hair always in place, in control Sesshomaru as we've always been led to believe, but someone who is very tired and overworked, only showing it when he is unable to uphold the mask any longer. It seems that Kagome is missing a key sign here as she longs for him with a dwindling hope. He has shown her his vulnerable side from the moment he steps through the door, something he doesn't do with just anyone. She should have realized that, but I think she's far too close to the situation to notice. I think it's interesting, though, that she does notice that he doesn't approve of her friends. Her thoughts on Koga are dead on. He is a flake and I've always thought that even if Ayame only appears in the anime. He just doesn't seem the type to keep an interest of any kind for very long, and even in the end of the manga runs off into the sunset without finalizing the deal. In contrast, it seems that Sesshomaru finishes things straight through until completion. It was a nice touch to have him, in his tired stupor, address Kagome as ma'am. Here we see him hand over control to her when if he had not been utterly exhausted would have never happened. He has chosen her, without her realizing it. She just has to learn how to read his signs that much better. I liked the way she pampered him immediately, only to come back and find him fast asleep. I think while we see her being attracted to his appearance, it's his personality that she's becoming more attracted to over time, which his is nice to see. Too often it seems that people have to overtly point out the fact that Sesshomaru is beautiful and that's why a girl would love him. It's this softness to his face in sleep and his trust of Kagome that makes her want him here, not that he's a pretty face. It's also why she's sitting by the phone waiting for a phone call from Koga when she could have called him herself and gone out if he had agreed. Instead, she chooses to wait for Sesshomaru because I think she was unconsciously worried about him. The way she kisses him was sweet, too. I had a feeling, though, when she "woke" him that he wasn't really sleeping at that point. He knew what she had been doing all along, just wanted to indulge in it for awhile. It's another sign that she should truly take notice. Best of all was his veiled challenge. She started it and had better be careful that she is able to finish it, indeed. It's nice to see that someone else gets the subtle nature of Sesshomaru's sense of humor. He plays, just not as overtly as others do. If it's pulled off correctly, Sesshomaru can be the comic of a piece, but only if one can savor such dry humor. Bravo and I hope to have more time to read through this at a faster pace!
| Title: From Your Sess/Rin Shipper
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2009 16:23 PDT
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You know that I am a hardcore Sesshomaru/Rin shipper, and while we don't agree on that, I had to comment on your work. It's only fair after all of the help you've given me on mine as of late! The first drabble in this Fleeting collection really worked for me. I am abhorrent to the Sess/Kag pairing usually due to the fandom cliches we have discussed in the past, but this, this is different. It wasn't the modern era setting, either. Both characters were spot on in comparison to their canon selves---and yet you teased MORE out of them. You captured both Sesshomaru's strength and his vulnerabilities all at once. It is so easy to play up the strong,all mighty fanon version of Sesshomaru while ignoring his inherent weaknesses. I like that he is bothered by the little details. I love that he and Kagome have become roommates. He might justify it as needing someone to split the rent, but I can see right through him. He needed a companion and didn't want to voice that. The fact that he's the one taking her home seems so appropriate, too. I like Kagome's fighting against him at every turn. She frustrates him, and he frustrates her, but not so overtly that it becomes its own cliche. Here, I can actually SEE and BELIEVE that these two could work in an actual relationship. So much of the time I find them to be totally OOC and doing things that don't fit their personalities, and here you have them doing things I couldn't imagine them doing, but working so well. I loved the way Sesshomaru spoke in clipped sentences to her throughout the story, up until the end when his vulnerable side showed and he had to admit that he CARES for her. Brilliant. It was grudging and with reservation that he admit an emotion, but he did it anyways and in such a convincing way that I felt that emotion from him. It wasn't just on the page, I could sense it in him, and realized it had been there the moment he had peeled her from the floor and took her home. I think it's interesting that he almost acted like her chaperon at the party, disenchanted by both Koga and Inuyasha's behavior.I can see them in a pissing contest over alcohol, however, and it is so Kagome to join in and prove to the boys that she can handle herself. Nice touch having Sesshomaru also admit that he was impressed with her tolerance level. He might not be able to express himself easily, but when he does, he gets to the point! I think we see him much the same way, believe it or not. It's simply the woman that he's with that's different. He loves to project that he is the alpha dog of the roost, the one in complete control, and yet, here he almost yields in that split second to her--almost but not quite. He desires someone who he feels is truly his alpha. I think he also hides a lot of his true self behind his clipped speech or his aloof mannerisms, and you captured that as well. It's how I approach him quite often. He's not all about the kicking ass and taking names! I intend to follow this to the conclusion, and I admit, this first drabble in the series has me hooked---much to my surprise. As I've said, any pairing can believable if it is only presented in the correct manner! Look forward to more of my longwinded reviews. You should be getting quite a few of them from here on out.
| Reviewed By: emmibubbles On: April 16, 2009 23:41 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yet another chapter that kept me on the edge of my seat! i can't wait to see how kagome confronts inuyasha! keep it up!!!
| Reviewed By: DARKENEDDEMONESS On: April 16, 2009 19:52 PDT
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Poor Kagome!!! You gotta be strong girl or just have a breakdown and show Sesshoumaru how much your hurting!!! Keep up the great work!!!
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