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| "Pain of Life" Reviews/Comments [ 66 ] | | Pages (5): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 › » ] | Title: pain of life
Reviewed By: jaded 16 On: May 15, 2004 12:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hay whats up i want you to update this fic!!! so get a move on already. Neadless to say this is a really cool fic, concidering what i just wrote. so please up date it soon.
| Reviewed By: Kiyomisa On: March 24, 2004 03:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, I really love your writting style, and the story itself has me absolutely gripped! I'm not sure I'm comfortable with what you did with Duo, since he happens to be my fave character, but ^-^' you wrote the story so well I kept reading and reading. Mostly I wanted to tell you that I think you got the characters very well, not how they were in the series, but as real people. They all reacted like real people would, and that's probably the reason I enjoy your story so much. I can't wait to see the next chapter! ^_~
| Reviewed By: Zero88 (Justin) On: January 14, 2004 09:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it. An' I'm not saying this 'cause I'm your friend. It's really good.
| Reviewed By: Danes With Fyre [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2004 02:52 CST
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I sat here for two and a half hours reading and I wanna see a update asap! This was a addicting story, indeed. I wanted to cry for Duo and WuFei. And I think it's time we put Mr. Heero Yuy in rehab, ne? I can't wait to see more, and I wish I found this sooner!
| Reviewed By: Gabbie On: January 02, 2004 11:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would have rated it higher than ten but seeing as though there is no higher rating i was kinda stuck. Anyway great fic and I do hope that the computer of yours is fixed soon. I would like to read more of this story cause you are a great writer. The detail is just perfect and the spelling is about one of the best there is. I hope that it stays this fun to read forever. The fic kept me on the "edge of my computer seat." The style of writing to say the least is very original hence the perfect 10 out of 10 which I don't give very often. Oh and HAPPY NEW YEAR EVERYBODY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Guess who On: December 12, 2003 22:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yo person. Whats your name? C-chan2? ok ur sopposed to tell me everything before u write it, and u haven't been doing that. I don't appreciate that. So now I want you to meet my little friend. LoL. Great work C-Chan2!
| Reviewed By: fire of phoenix On: November 09, 2003 14:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED THIS FIC. ITS SO BLOODY GOOD!!!! (all obsessed readers nod head enthusiastically) And you were right, it is lucrezia noin
| Reviewed By: Macarena On: August 09, 2003 01:53 CDT
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Hehe, don't worry about it. Ch. 15 was written just fine and it had a pretty good ending too. Keep up the great work and I hope you get your computer fixed soon!
///_^ | Reviewed By: Aria Lerendeair [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2003 08:49 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Wufei, Duo just made him feel like shit. Now
I wanna kick Duo's ass. Can I?! Pretty please?! I swear I won't hurt him too badly. *big smile*
He deserves it for hurting Wuffie! I love the idea of Nal *my nickname for her since I can't remember her whole name* calling him that. It is too cute! I know that I am now a mediaminer member and I had to add the last name cause someone else already had that name! Damn them!
Love ya always,
Aria Lerendeair | Reviewed By: Guess who On: August 05, 2003 15:15 CDT
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I have no choice but to give you a 10 out of 10. As I'v told you before you're an awesome writer. | Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2003 04:04 CDT
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OK, I'm new to this story, so I got all the angstiness (heh) all at once.
I really enjoy AU fics, and it is interesting to see how characters are portrayed in them, considering that their backgrounds are obviously going to be quite different outside the GW universe.
The constructive criticism part isn't too bad. A few typos or wrong words, but nothing that makes me want to bang my head against the monitor (I've seen some good stories that had SO many spelling errors, it was hard to get around them and into the plot). Once in a while the dialog is a bit rushed, but sometimes it works for the situation. There, that wasn't too bad, was it? :)
The funny thing is that I must be carrying my impression of the characters into the story, because despite the very dark portrayals of Duo and Heero, I find myself wanting to find some kind of redemption for them. Yes, for both of them. Duo's past has a lot to do with why he's the way he is, and his association with Heero hasn't helped. As for Heero, he makes a delightfully cold-hearted single-minded predator...and yet I still expect to see something HUMAN in him!
There are little bits that help show the character's inner demons, and I think that you've done well with Duo over all these chapters. His downright hatred for Wufei's mother, the abuse he suffered at the hands of his father, make for a believable motivation for him to act as despicably as he does towards Wufei.
There are occasional touches of humor, such as Zechs' complaint about knowing that Quatre fathered a child in the traditional sense - an image he didn't need in his head. Very realistic, too.
So even though I have this tiny bit of hope for even Heero to have some humanity, and that may be very unlikely as I don't know where the story will go, and he hasn't done much at all to show any signs of remorse, there was that scene where Duo tried to actually cuddle with him afterwards, and Heero let him for, OK, a couple of nanoseconds, that make me think that not even the "bad guys" can be 100% evil.
I find small things like this really make a story. The fact that I am wondering about the characters and what makes them tick is the sign of a story that has really captured your audience. And granted, my hope for a redeemed Heero in the future is most likely misplaced, but I really feel deeply for Duo, who is truly a victim himself, even though his violence towards Wufei is simply awful.
It's great that things aren't suddenly hunky-dory, too, because there is such a long standing cycle of abuse for Duo and Wufei. I was shocked at the confrontation between Heero and Duo. Bad Heero! Heh. I can't help it, I'm still waiting for something to start affecting him in ways that have nothing to do with his libido!
Sorry for rambling, but I am trying to review the whole dang thing, and as I said, I really am wondering about things like Quatre's current relationship as well as what really kept Heero with Duo for so many years. At first I thought it was the money, with the sex being secondary, but that stupid part of me that tries to see the good in him (again, not necessarily present, but I'd like to think so, naive fool that I am) expects something more.
I am of course not telling you how to portray your characters in any way, and if you find it works best to keep him the cold evil bastard, that's fine, too. As I have said already, the fact that I want to know why he's this way is enough. The dangers of using pre-existing characters, though, eh? I could actually see his behavior focus in a destructive manner, given his rather intense personality in the series.
Am I making any sense, or have I completely lost you?
Perhaps this is a good time to summarize.
An interesting story, with characters that I have come to care for and wish to see more of. There! | Reviewed By: mikisho On: June 17, 2003 13:22 CDT
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hey, its me again. thanks for mentioning me in your AN! so, whos the guy with quatre?? is it trieze? i cant think of any suggestions rite now, give me a day and i'll have some, k? oh yeah, and thanks for NOT letting duo die! i'll review 2marra! tchao!
Mikisho | Reviewed By: Finn On: June 16, 2003 18:34 CDT
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OOoohhhh love it love. So happy with the way it turned out. Can you add more or something. I love this story. | Reviewed By: celestialmoonstars [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2003 21:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi there! I read all 14 chapters before rating this fic so here's my overall view. The idea is really original. Makes me want to actually go and comfort poor Wufei so i guess that means a great deal. Having him living with Zechs is great too since they've never been that close in the series. Also making Duo so much more mature yet stupid ripped at my emotions. He's my favourite character in the series. In your story he doesn't really laugh much or smile let alone talk nonstop. but hey thats no biggie i just wanna read more. keep at it! | Reviewed By: Koriko_dragoness [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2003 17:53 CDT
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-Hugs- Thank you!...It's a very very good story and I've been waiting or a new chapter -grins- Can't wait for next update!
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