| "The Chaos Knight" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: zerotolerance On: July 09, 2004 19:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
please e - mail me when you've written more of the story?zerotolerance1@home.nl 1. I think you should make Ranma related to tenchi and let him use the power of jurai and the lighthawk wings. 2. or you could make it a Yu Yu Hakusho crossover and let him use reiki,youki or both.And let him be trained under genkai or make her his grandmother(nodoka's side). 3. He has traveled to the slayers world and learned *ALL* their spells white,black and shamanistic under galnaav or rezzo the red priest. 4. You could make him a saiyan and he's trained by goku and vegita at the same time. 5. You could make a combination off option 2 an 4 make him a saiyan that uses spirit energy.
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Reviewed By: Bill On: July 14, 2003 05:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
C.Rose this whole plot of Ranma being Pluto's son is pretty much oringinal and Ranma being Washu's grandson is interesting. And what about the Tenchi crew? Why is it oringnal? I will tell you why,this is the second story I have seen with Ranma as Pluto's son and the first story with Washu as Ranma's grandmother. |
Reviewed By: Zero On: January 27, 2003 20:22 CST
Comment/Review:
This fic is going to fast. I'm confused by the way you explained things in the middle of chapter 1. There are some grammatical errors, wrong word usages, and some other little things. Was their a native english speaker proof-reading this. The idea about Ranma being Pluto's son is pretty old, and how the hell did you put Washu in. She didn't get that smart nor powerful enough to be able to sense anything. Plus, isn't she still in the academy in Jurai. Can anyone clarify this to me because I haven't watched Tenchi recently. |
Reviewed By: busogre On: January 27, 2003 19:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
it wasn't very original, considering its been done a million times before and your grammar was so bad that at times I found it almost impossible to follow. |
Reviewed By: C. Rose On: January 19, 2003 20:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
For a Pologue it's alright, but the idea that Ranma is pluto's son is really old and cliche. So far it has potential, but with the hundreds of r/sm crosses this idea is very over used. Since this is a prologue I won't comment on the need for the need for better detail, like what the back ground was like? Where it was taking place, what the weatehr was like? were there witnesses? What was every body wearing? What did the monster look like? and a whole host of other little things.
I'm going to keep an eye on this one to see where you're going with it, good luck |
Reviewed By: oodjob On: January 18, 2003 22:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Comment/Review:
some things in your sentences don't really make any sense. |
Reviewed By: nicknova On: January 18, 2003 22:10 CST
Comment/Review:
well it's been done before alot but lets see if you can put a spin on things. |
Reviewed By: ryuken On: January 18, 2003 20:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i can't wait for the next chapter great story |
