| "Ryou's Fiancee" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Reviewed By: neko_e On: April 19, 2005 04:15 CDT
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Cant wait for the next update. But im a bit confused with the name Ranma has here in the prologue. First Ranma-chan is just 'Ranma' then suddenly Ranko [end of prologue]. and not by Bakura. This is the scene: "Ranma, where is your father?" asked Ryou's father. "Right in front of you" Said Ranma calmly as she pointed to the giant Panda. Ryou and his father fell down Anime style. -------------------------------------------------- Genma(Human Form) and Ryou's dad are talking in one of the rooms while Ranko and Ryou sat on the couch in the living room. Ryou couldn't stop looking at her... two reason... 1. She was VERY BEAUTIFUL and 2. She looked familiar to him. Ranma saw him looking at her and she glared at him. "What are you looking at?" he turned his head away. "Nothing" He replied softly. slince was all that was heard in the room. 'C'mon Ranko... he didn't mean anything... he probably got in this the same way I did...' she sighed, Ryou was going to ask what was wrong but there parents came in the living room. "Ranko... Ryou...." Both teens turn there attention to there dads. "Ranko my dear, meet my son and your fiancee Ryou!" smile Ryou's Father
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Reviewed By: Mutant On: August 17, 2004 19:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the first Yu-gi-oh and Ranma crossover fanfic that I have truely liked. I hope you will continue it and improve even more with each new chapter.
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Reviewed By: Demon Fox Thief On: April 17, 2004 18:51 CDT
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OMG!!! This fic is...unique. I nearly screamed when I read the rating (which is a good reaction for me). I nearly fell over clcking onto this. BUt Bakura does have some explaining to do, that's freaky cause I didn't think he'd have enough heart to love someone. PLZ continue.
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Reviewed By: Maruken On: April 15, 2004 01:19 CDT
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RANKO?!! Bakura you had better as hell explain.
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Reviewed By: review On: April 13, 2004 12:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
your third chapter was good except the spelling was a little screwed, you repeated some words,ranma would have already seen the uniform on the other students,wasn't ranma already wearing a uniform if so then how come she wasn't talked to by the teacher or principal. also ranma would probably still be buggin about the fact that she really is a boy. maybe you should read former chapters before you make new ones espacially from your long writers block.
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Reviewed By: lightspire On: April 09, 2004 04:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, the chapters are short, and kind of choppy, and I would recommend a pre-reader, becasue it seems you use the correct spelling of words, just not the right words for the text. I find it enjoyable, though I wish the chapters were a little larger. Could use a bit of work (in my humble opinion...) But I like it. I'd be happy to see more.
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Reviewed By: KuraMagicianGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2004 23:42 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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Interesting. Never read a Ranma fic. Well UD soon. Ja ne.
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Title: nice job
Reviewed By: Jasmine and her gang [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2004 18:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Although I have never seen Ranma 1/2 it's really good and I hope you update soon...
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Reviewed By: reviewer On: February 12, 2004 16:09 CST
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this fanfic is too good to waste! try to update this. this is the same person who reviewed last time. Plus i wanna know what ryougas gonna do. UPDATE DAMN IT!
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Reviewed By: reviewer On: February 01, 2004 12:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I love this fanfic! i know you probably stopped writing but i urge you to keep going. i like how you got the personalities to match
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Reviewed By: Nakerti On: November 16, 2003 17:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is funny! And why does BAKURA remember her? This is gonna be funny! UPDATE!
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Reviewed By: YugiohNicole@aol.com On: October 11, 2003 02:17 CDT
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This is the first time I have ever seen a Ranma/Yugioh crossover before, but I like it and hope in the future to read more of these kinds of crossover. Hope to read more soon.
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Reviewed By: Gate Dragon On: September 03, 2003 10:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
If this is your first fic good job... if not it is total crap.
If English is not your native language then you tried your best... if it is then GET PREREADERS BEFORE YOUR BAD GRAMMER CAUSES SEIZUES!
If you were trying for creativity then you faild miserably regaurdless, except in the area of original premiss.
But... I have enjoyed it mostly, so it wasn't all that bad.
All in all not something I'm going to be looking for future chapters on.
Try harder next fic. |
Reviewed By: Kitiara On: August 21, 2003 12:37 CDT
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This is so kewl! Do another chapie pwease! |
Reviewed By: shitsumon On: August 21, 2003 17:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the first time I've read a Yugioh & Ranma 1/2 fic, and I hope to read more soon! |
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