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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2005 02:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just found this one and I like the first chapter a lot. I will continue reading this because it's wonderful!
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Reviewed By: anubiset (too lazy to log in) On: June 18, 2005 21:53 CDT
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Sorry about being gone for so long. I have been busy. Beta reading can be hectic. I love how this story is going. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 19:29 CDT
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Wow...just wow... This was definitely your strongest writing. It's been such a long time since I read the previous chapter, but it was easy to get back into it and understand the feelings of the characters, atmosphere, etc. You really packed emotion into this one. I'm a little surprised about the violent parts, but I trust you know what you're doing. Thanks for using my rubber stamp for inspiration! *feels loved* Good luck on exams and your next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Jeremu On: June 14, 2005 19:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
From the little bit that I read, I liked it. It was well put and will probably turn out to be a great story. I'm kind of lost on the names, considering I don't know them in Japanese :-D. Ah Well, all in all it was good.
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 16:45 CST
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Hiii. You're finally back! ^__^ I missed reviewing. o.o Oh, and the italics worked! You did a really great job with this chapter. The characters' personalities seemed to stand out even more than usual. Aria was really cute and Hector was really scary. o-o; Poor Toby. xx; Please have Aria fling Hector in the air or something crazy. XD
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Reviewed By: anubiset (somputer problems) On: December 10, 2004 18:26 CST
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I loved this so much. Yeah, the Ishtars are here. I love those two. Great idea using the characters from Bakurasgirl`s stuff. I love her works. Read them all the time. She can`t get a new story out without me knowing about it. Any other characters of hers going to be used?
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2004 17:14 CST
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Whee. That was funny. Yep, I had no idea that that was how you were planning on using the math problem. Oh, and AP Calculus BC is the most fun math class ever...it in no way resembles a man in black threatening your life. XD I knew someone would get kidnapped! Looks like Kaiba doesn't have enough hidden people. I was a little confused at how Aria couldn't do anything to stop him. Maybe he can have some sort of pharaonic item that repels her...or maybe he knows magic and that's how he got in in the first place...just a thought. What's going to happen with Yugi's side of the story? Heh. I pictured Kaiba's PR people as the Turks. XD Woop! It's gonna go nuts! Great job again. ^_^ (and good luck with your project, if I haven't told you that enough already)
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Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2004 11:31 CST
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Never mind it. Ayyway, great chappie! The return of the blue silverware has arrived! Wait... if it's blue, then it's not SILVERware... So... you cna't call it silverware 'cause it's not silver... But silverware is a generalization for all utensils... So technically you can... *brain explodes* @_@ Oh well. Picnics are fun!! ^_^ Typical Yugi, obsessed with food. Typical Yami and Bakura, obsessed with hating each other. ^^;; Well, I hope you update soon again!
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2004 15:56 CST
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A picnic with a block of cheese. What more could you ask for? heh. I feel sorry for Ryou, especially since he punched himself in the head. O.o; If you're still suffering from writers block, having Aria be targeted for the kidnapping would make things interesting. But I see that the blue silverware (hmm, but it's plastic...) is going to have its comeback, so what could be more interesting than that? XD Good job as usual. Looking forward to Kaiba's little plan. Don't give up on the italics! ^_^
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Reviewed By: anubiset (to lazy to log in) On: November 17, 2004 12:01 CST
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I love this story. I don`t know what is happening with Ryou, but you better not break his heart. I hate it when that happens. Though I have plans for one where that happens. I hate writers block. So many sotry ideas, but none are working out. I am feeling better thanks.
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Title: Sorry for it being really late
Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2004 16:43 CDT
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It still hasn't happened yet... ^^;;; Sorry about that. Anyways, intersting chappie to say her least. I want to know what the beacon is for!! >< AH!! Update soon!
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Reviewed By: anubiset [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2004 20:01 CDT
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Wow. Intense. What is that guy Hector up to anyway? I can`t get enough of this one. I hope to get more of my works out soon. I got the flu. Oh well, keep it coming.
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2004 19:46 CDT
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Ah! Well this is an unexpected twist. I liked Aria's craziness with the flour and and how she always wants candy from people. ^^' This beacon thingy is a cool. Maybe the guy put the kidnapped boy in the mansion and is going to blame Kaiba to get back at him?...maybe Aria is secretly obsessed with cute boys and is collecting them? Oo;; Have Aria use more magic/mind skills is my only suggestion. Can't wait to read what happens next. I wonder how Jou's memory loss will fit in with this...
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Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 20:23 CDT
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AH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You have tainted his pureness! >< Oh well, I've probably done so in my fics without even realizing it. ^^;;;;; Well, my Tainted Angel fic is no longer innocent... ^^;; Green, green, green, and wait for it.... more green! Jou is obsessed with green stuff. I'm surprised his bath wasn't green colored. Oh well, let's hope he wakes up in this dimension the next time. Update soon!
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2004 16:35 CDT
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That was awesome! The plot is twisting about pretty well. I especially liked it when Aria "cleanses" his mind, and how she appears to be snippy-snappy (yeah, I made up a word) in the dream. She's definitely hiding something and trying to affect Jou's memories too. I know she probably won't end up being a bad person, but it's still getting to be very interesting. Play with his mind more! ^-^
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