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| "And all else will fade" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] | Title: FFARG Review Ch 5
Reviewed By: Aquamarine [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 18:13 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hellish, indeed. This chapter was quite creepy and depressing, which I think was the desired effect, so, well done! ^_^ Your descriptions are excellent. I could visualize everything that was happening - hear Sango's voice taunting him - taste the coppery blood raining from the sky - all that good stuff. I wonder, like Miroku, what on earth is going on, and how he got there, but I assume you'll get to that later in the story. I thought Miroku was pretty much in character, for the most part, but I wonder if he's really the type of person to yell, "My friends are going to get you!" Then again, maybe that's the point... he's realizing he hasn't trusted his friends enough. All in all, this was a very emotional chapter and I think you wrote it well. ~ Aquamarine
| Title: pretty words
Reviewed By: surfacer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2005 05:16 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hiya, I rarely write reviews and thought it was high time that I did. (This place lacks reviewers like nobody's business, huh?) Anyway, I saw your story listed on the featured thing in the forums and thought to give it a shot. I enjoyed it. If there's criticism to give it's that it's a bit hard to find the plot beneath your writing style. At the finish, I'm thinking you have a good sense in choice of words, but maybe a little more substance was needed to move the story along. Maybe. It's still a great fic though. Please write more!
| Reviewed By: tasha_chan28 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 16:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must say this was a good story.
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