| "Midnight Meets Moonlight" Reviews/Comments [ 80 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: Cochrann [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2006 15:59 CDT
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OMG, you have to update as soon as possible! That chapter was really good and I absolutely adore this story.
| Title: Oh dear, no, no, no.
Reviewed By: DarkCrystalis [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2006 10:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa, whoa, whoa, WHOA! Stop, stop, stop, stop, STOP! I've loved this story, right from the beginning when I started reading it. BUT...you've just gone and done something VERY silly. Up until chapter 10, it was utterly astounding how you'd managed to keep Sesshoumaru in character the entire time, which makes me far happier than you could ever imagine. Sesshoumaru, to be blunt, is supposed to be a pompous asshole; overall disliked, cold-hearted, and with little emotion. You've portrayed him well, up until this point. However, you've just made a VERY big mistake. To make Sesshoumaru fall in love with Kagome so SOON was something you really shouldn't have done; we've BARELY passed the part where he's admitted to himself that he likes her (he hasn't even told HER that he LIKES her yet); but now he's suddenly in love? If you look at it from their perspective, he's only known her a few weeks, if even that long! If the Sesshoumaru in the future loves her, that's understandable (seeing how he's probably known/loved her for many years), but for the past Sesshoumaru to already have these feelings, in my opinion, ruins the story. I think that his emotions were just thrown into sixth gear and are far too advanced for the storyline's plot. I'm not happy with how this has happened at all; now everything, to me, will seem rushed in the story and the initial feeling of the slow pace between them will have vanished. It feels like, to me, you just wanted to rush his feelings so you could end the story; I couldn't see any other reason why he would fall in love so quickly. Even my boyfriend, (we fell in love quickly as well), but it took US a few months at the least (him maybe a couple). Anyway, my point is, I don't like what you've done with Sesshoumaru--too much, too fast. As well, this story reminds me of another I'm reading, entitled "Phoenix Blade: Time Lapse" or something along those lines--they have the back-and-forth time travel theme, (it's an IK pairing) and the whole fact that Inuyasha knows what will happen in the past, but won't tell Kagome and all that jazz. Perhaps you should be careful in how you approach your story; you don't want it to seem overly similar to a pre-existing fanfiction. HOWEVER, there are other things you are doing well, (putting aside your mistake) which I am going to address. I've noticed that you've got a well rounded plot. Things seem well planned out, there are many twists and turns which will probably show sooner or later, which keep all the readers (including myself) engaged. Also, I'm sure you hear this a lot, but I honestly love your writing style. It sounds professional, intriguing, and is overall admirable. To tell the truth, your story is beautifully written. There isn't too much description, or a lack of it; everything is just as it should be. If there hadn't been the rushing of feelings, I'd say the story is amazing; however, with that huge error, I'll have to keep reading before I critique how I feel about it. Sincerely, -DarkCrystalis
| Reviewed By: anime pixie On: July 07, 2006 11:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love this story!! it's wonderfully written and thought out. i cannot wait until the next chapter is posted. the plot is original; i've never read a fan fic like this one before. keep up the good work. happy writing.
| Title: WOW
Reviewed By: Koga or Kouga/ Kouga's Girl On: June 28, 2006 19:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMFG you must keep writing!! Your story actualy made me cry ONCE (guy stabs her with a truth telling shot) ok ok A LOT... That was the best story i ever read... I have a major obssesion with the whole inuyasha story line... Ok this is gettin a bit creepy now!?!?!?!
| Reviewed By: Inuyasha's Mate On: June 10, 2006 15:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First off, I want to apologize for not reviewing sooner, Mujitsu(Moved, computer not set up in a long while). Second, I just want to say I adored this fanfic, almost as good as FRFP. Sesshy:What do u mean, almost?(growls softly)ME:It was only 2 points away from being just as good.Sesshy:(glares at me) That's what I thought.ME:(sweat drop)Anyways, I saw that you kept closer to Fluffy's character, and tried your very best to not be OC. Which, as we all know, is very hard to do when you have your own ideas for a character. Especially Mr. Fluffy-pants, he so fun to play around with in story lines!!... Sorry, gots carried away.Inu:That's for sure(growls at me, mummbles)Suppose to me my mate...clinging onto that dog like a puppy.ME:I can hear you, remember? But to get to the point, it's a bummer to hear that you no longer do any personal responses anymore to your LOYAL fan(s)Just 'cause I didn't have my internet set up for 7 months of- Inu:(covers my mouth)O.K. That's enough out of you, remember, we might have young viewers reading this... I think what she's trying to get at is, she misses your personal responses, but she will have to learn to deal w/it.ME:(free, clears throat)Yeah, but-Inu:(death glare)ME:Heh-heh...Yeah. Personally, I can't wait until the next chapter. But I have to say I did tear up alot at Sango and Miroku's gravesite ch. and (sniff) Inu-Inu-Inuyasha's...(tears forming)d-de-death(breaks down into tears) Waah!... Inuyasha don't die.Inu:(paniced at the sight of tears) Don't cry!! I'm right here, it was all just a part of Mujitsu's story, I haven't left(holds me close)ME:(Sniff,sniff)Right...It was just so real and so well written. And she's the only author I know of that can make me feel the story actually happened and can make me cry like that(sniff)Inu:(thinking to self)Note to self- kill her for making my mate cry like this.(Outloud)Well she does do a good job, honestly, I even thought I was going to be sat a few times when Kagome would say "sit" in her fanfics(trying to get me to stop crying)ME: Alright(sits up,claps) You heard it live ladies and gentleman, Inuyasha approves. So I suggest you all that haven't reviewed this lovely, beautiful, well thought out, brilliant... Sesshy:To make it short for those of you readers, just review the story before I hunt every single one of you down and- ME:Sesshomaru! He's threatening off his own accord, you know the fanfic is good!! First Inuyasha, now Fluffy, what parallel universe are we living in!!!(The Inu-brothers stare at me) Ahem...Point is if you all don't make Mujitsu happy, then I won't be happy, and you don't want to see me unhappy.Inu: Mostly, I will not have my mate,Kamine(me), unhappy. So if she's unhappy I will hunt you all down and give you all a rosary bead necklace and have you all submitt to my demands to reviewing this masterpiece.ME:Ohh...Inuyasha(stary eyed)Your so adoarably forcefull, I knew there was a reason why I mated with you.Sesshy:(twitches)To much sharing...ME:Review! Review! Review!(sees Inu trying to slip out)Come here you adorable dog!Inu:Hey! I'm not a-(I tackle him to the ground outside the door) Ahhhh!Sesshy:Yeah...ME:(outside the door) Ahhh-ha!! I got your adorable ears, you can go nowhere now!!Inu:(Pops his head through the door)Please...Help me, Sesshomaru!!(gets pulled back out, screams)Sesshy: No, too entertained. If you worthless humans review, maybe she'll keep hold of Inu so he can't kill you, but I will for those of you who don't, I'll-Mujitsu:FLUFFY!!! Are you in here?Sesshy:Got to go...(Runs away)Mujitsu:(Comes in)He was here... Sesshy come back, I'm only going to smother you with my undying affection towards you!!!(Sees him) Got You!(tackles him, they fall ontop of the computer)ME:Nooooo! My computer!!
| Reviewed By: MsKittyKyo [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2006 08:20 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Such a wonderful story. Sess and Kag make a great couple. Looking forward to more chapters.
| Title: Awesome!
Reviewed By: rainydays [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2006 22:04 CDT
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wonderful chapter! ooh... sesshoumaru is ticked off.. hah. It's so weird to see Shippo like that... I mean I'm used to the little fox demon.. not a killing machine. anyways, thanks for the update!! I loved it!
| Title: wow : o
Reviewed By: Hab On: May 21, 2006 23:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i think this is one of my most favourite fics ever. ^_^ i love it sooo much i don't even know how to say it. L M A O. and this has to be my most favourite lemon EVER. you have a talent for writing so don't ever stop. and i don't mean fanfiction. i mean writing in general. love habby
| Title: WooT!
Reviewed By: Rinseternalsoul [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2006 17:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Congratulations on your winnings! You sooooo deserve it! This chapter just backs it up and puts you in running for Best Lemon, because it was perfection. It was all heat and tenderness meshed together creating an erotic first time for our favorite couple. I loved it! Rinseternalsoul
| Reviewed By: EmpyrealFantasy [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2006 03:50 CDT
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AHHHHHHHH I love you. I do. I have written a review to you before, I think...but I just wanted to say I love you. You made it perfect. I'm swooning here. I read on Single Spark, actually (found you here first) but since I hear their reviews mess up, I thought I'd pop over here to tell you that you're wonderful. XD Keep it up, I can't wait to read more! MORE!!
| Title: Mighty wong
Reviewed By: Chibes whos not logged in On: May 13, 2006 01:47 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey your lemon made me remember this one thread on live journal and it had me laughing...sorry if you don't get the referance but you can always look it up... I loved the lemon and I wasn't laughing at that but the thread...
| Title: omgosh!
Reviewed By: rainydays -nsi On: May 08, 2006 00:28 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say this is an exquisite piece of work! I usually hate Kagome and Sesshoumaru fanfics.. but this is really good! I like how you didn't make Inuyasha and Kagome hate each other or Inuyasha be extremely rude to Kagome like the usual fanfics. Wonderful job! I hope you update soon!!
| Reviewed By: amandachristine06@sbcglobal.net On: May 07, 2006 20:34 CDT
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Oh, my gosh! Can I tell you how much I love you??? I mean, this story rocks! My mom came in my room earlier wondering why I was crying. Wanna know why? Your story! It is so wonderfully written. I'm a beginning author. Well, I was. I haven't resumed writing my stories yet because of some messed up family stuff. But anyway, check out my stories if you can. It's amazing how you write. I have so much trouble trying to fill a page with quality writing. I mean, either I have too much dialogue or not enough. I can't ever find the perfect balance. I've finally started writing again, though. Anyway, I love your story, and I hope you like the review. Don't you hate the crappy ones? I'm so glad you take the time to share your talent! amandachristine06
| Title: WOO!
Reviewed By: dfgiu On: May 07, 2006 17:50 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WAH! that was mean! i really cant't wait until the next chapter! please write soon!great story!
| Reviewed By: golden_kitsune (too lazy to sign into her account) On: May 06, 2006 09:36 CDT
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What did you do?!?! What happened! Aaaa!
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