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Reviewed By: CareeCypher [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2007 19:08 CDT
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you have a few minor spelling errors but other then that good work on the language aspect of this chapter. Okay first things first, i have to chew you a bit, i hope not to bad though. just to let you know, i don't like kikyo. i think she is stupid and over confident and well just annoying, however she is portraid over and over and over again as 'kiny-hoe' and truth be told, it's rather boring. so you have established her here as the classic 'kiny-hoe' however this is the first chapter and it is easy to change things, (not that you have to, it is your story, i am just giving my opinion) Kikyo was not always the bitch she is now. she suffered from very tramatic events and they changed her(doesn't help that she's just a pot of clay running around on two legs either) but lots of people seem to forge that and just turn her int this bitch that is a bitch for the sake of being a bitch. anyways so my idea is that possibly kikyo has suffered from events that make her what she is so that nsted of feeding the classic 'kinky-hoe' portraial of kikyo you put your own spin on it. it would be iteresting and new i havn't seen a single high-school story that does that yet so you can do it your way. The premis of your story is not overly original so your going to have to work hard at keeping the plot interesting, but if you can keep it interesting AND realistic i think you have a the start of an interesting story.
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Reviewed By: Jessie Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2007 13:19 CDT
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Very cute story. I like the way you started it out with Inu totally into Kags. I can't wait to read more!!
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Reviewed By: helloooooooo On: April 12, 2007 13:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i lovvveeeeee this story plsssssssssss update soon
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Reviewed By: jullun On: April 11, 2007 11:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
funny. I love it. It is soooo cute. I wont to read more chapters. I hope u don't have writers block ;P
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Reviewed By: miley On: April 05, 2007 17:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i liked it.highly orignal.you do have a coulpe a spelling mistakes though.but it was great.a very good start.cant wait till the next chapter.update soon.bye
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Reviewed By: @__@ On: April 04, 2007 21:50 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cute.. InuYasha is totally ooc. but nonetheless cute ^^
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