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| "The Adventures of Alan and Jamie" Reviews/Comments [ 24 ] | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] | Title: Update any time soon
Reviewed By: Light Speed Hedgehog On: March 10, 2004 20:09 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Been a little over a month now. I'm kind of running out of ideas so I will try to see if can come with any thing else until then update.
| Reviewed By: Hmph again. On: February 07, 2004 02:52 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope you're happy, you've actually made something so bad, a friggin' graboid just spat it back out. (El Blanco starts making hacking noises) Look, buddy, it's against my policy to make flames, but really, some people just deserve them. I don't hate you (More than I hate the rest of the world) but please consider learning better grammar, spelling, punctuation, and...y'know...take some fuckin' notes in your English classes. Trust me, it helps. (El Blanco: (HACK!!!!!!)
| Reviewed By: Hmph. On: February 07, 2004 02:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
...El Blanco, eat this nice fic, will you? Please don't forget the illiterate reviewers and gawd-awful writing style of the author. (Shriek, rumble rumble, boom, roar, chomp) Thank you.
| Title: About time
Reviewed By: Future Auther On: February 06, 2004 22:12 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
About time you updated. Now on to the tips. Don't forget Sakura's home town. If Alan gonna biomerge to mega later in the story, I'll leave you incharge of who he'll do it with. I,m kind of sencing a crush that Sakura has for Alan. I don't think you might go with this one, but it just a thougt I know from digimon seasons 1 and 2 Kari was the Child of light, but lets just say that Alan's light power is stronger than Kari's being the chosen and all, anyway maybe that vampire digimon known in japansess Vapmdemon can fight Alan with the little help of season 1 and 2, but like I said before, I don,t think you might take this tip, but thats up to you. Befor I go Have you read the Review I last put up look at the part where I said about your story being a game. Tell me what you thougt of the idea and maybe you can fit the Anime that added to the idea. I suposs somebody else got my future auther name so I will come with a nother P.O.S until just call me F.A.
| Reviewed By: legolas123 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2004 04:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alan is my best friend and a great author. Good work Alan
| Title: Time to shift this story in to high grear
Reviewed By: Viewtiful Joe On: January 14, 2004 18:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just to let you know I change my future auther name from Chris Redfield to Viewtiful Joe from the vedio game on the Nintendo Gamecube. And sorry if any one thinks I was trying to steal anyone else's name or auther name. Now on the the real deal. Lets get a nother chapter up and see what happens next cause it has been to long. I want to say on thing to you and everybody out there. If any one who is a Sailor Moon fans that are reading and injoying P.O.R.'s (Power of Renamon) story here, then check this out. If we had the Sailor Moon cast added in this story and made a video game out of it, it could be the most best game of the year, maybe more. Just immagin all the graphics with tamers slashing cards, Ash battling Team Rocket, catching clow cards, robattles, draggen ball action, duel monsters,and Sailor Scouts transforming and lets not for get the Final Fantasy RPG like gameplay. Hey Alan, if you want to tell me want you think about that kind of idea just tell me at the end of your next chapter.
| Reviewed By: Viewtiful Joe On: January 14, 2004 18:14 CST
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| Title: A little advise
Reviewed By: Chirs Redfield On: December 08, 2003 20:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I got another one for you. If the Darkness trys to take the tamer's home town. See if the darkness brings back Leomon and takes control of his mind and Jeri comes and try to remind him what he said to her at the day of his death. She has a lion's heart and when he's free of the dark control, Jeri's partnership with Leomon summens a power that they can give to Alan. Which is the Final Fantasy 8 limit break Lion's Heart. Not bad if I do say so my self. Oh by the way, how about you at least try to get 3 or 4 chapters updated by the 25th of this month. As Ace Ventora pet detective alway said "Take care now. Bye bye then."
| Title: Crazy Tips
Reviewed By: Chris Redfield On: November 22, 2003 22:16 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now before I give you more tips I want to clear one thing up. Chirs as in Chirs Redfield is my future athur, my real name is Jonathan Smith. If you want to know where I got Chirs Redfield from it from a Charicter from Resident Evil on the Gamecube. NOW for the tips. You can give Alan the power to run as fast as Sonic and turn in to a super form with all 7 chaos emeralds. Give Alan a Dules Monster card all the Gardian Angle. I made this card up my self. His attack is Heaven' s wrath attack, you make up the rest. And a trap card called Heaven's Jugdment. This card can only work with the Gardian Angle. with this combo the Gardian Angle can kill one monster instantly (even if its more powerful) and attack Alan's opoinet's life points directly. And a magic card called Holy light of Heaven. This card can turn your opoinets Dark type monsters in to light type monsters and join your side. Well that it for right now by the way lets see if you can update 3 to 4 more chapter before Cristmas Day. And again I'm sorry mistake in my name.
| Title: Speed it up
Reviewed By: Chirs Redfield On: November 10, 2003 18:23 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I realy like what you got here, but you got to speed the updating more. If your stuck or something I got one good tip. Let Alan have a blue card and make hime digivole into a Ultimate digimon. The name and looks of his ultimate form is left up to you. I just want to be surpirsed. Now update before December comes.
| Reviewed By: Sakuracheary On: October 27, 2003 13:54 CST
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This is a really cool fanfic so far!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:) ;)
| Title: Finally
Reviewed By: FireEyes Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2003 09:44 CDT
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About time. I can't wait for the next chapter, but just don't take a month to post it, alright? Later
| Title: Taking too long
Reviewed By: Chris Redfield On: October 14, 2003 16:34 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
First of all I'm waiting for the next chapter second of all you're taking too long btween you chapters. When you first started on this thing 3 days between chapters, now it like once a month ot so. It's time to stop slaking and get cracking.One more thing give Alan a limit break, if you can think of one that is.
| Title: CONTINUE!
Reviewed By: FireEyes Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2003 18:07 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Come on, dude! Continue this story! It's really good and I want to read more! And when is the Yu-Gi-Oh! cast going to appear? Please continue! | Reviewed By: Chris On: July 07, 2003 01:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's been a while sence you updated. Now before I go on let just just say that I`m not fanfic writer yet, and their's one more thing I want to say. If their's any thing that I hate about this fanfic it is a cliffhanger. You shoud go on if you don't have any ideas then here are some hints from me. You know on the Final Fantasy game when the people you're playing as takes a few hits, it triggers the "limmet breaks" (whick I like to call them) which alows them to us very special attacks rether than the regular special attacks.You really should give Alan a limit break like when Alan is realy hurt bad then he fills a blast of energy in him which makes him feel like fighing more than ever unleashes a shavge attack. Another tip from me is give Alan a summoning like Sheava the ice summoning or maybe Doomtrain form Final Fantasy 8. Another tip you don't have to take this one if you don't want to, but I just want to tell you any way. See if you can have Sephroth bring Leomon back to life to fight Alan. I know I sound crazy, but see if you can fit that in when the darkness tires to take over the Tamers hometown or somthing and while you're at it add some other cast from Digimon, Pokemon, Medabots, Card Captor Sakura, and Dragan Ball Z. And don't forget about Zell's taste for hotdogs. Well thats all the tips I can give you. Oh one more thing, you need to ajust your spelling abit.
Now go on and finish this thing to the end and let me remind you I HATE cliffhagers in such good stories like these. Reminds my of Sonic SatAm. One more thing before I finish up. If any one wants a good dirty NC17 crossover fanfic then I suggest sombody out there comes up with a fanfic that has Sailor Moon, Sonic, Yu-Gi-Oh, Digimon, Pokemon, and many more that come togther with Conker's Bad Fur Day. If any one as played the game on Nintedo 64 you'll know what I'm talking about. | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] |
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