| "Tainted Choices" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: ShadowStar666 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2007 11:43 CDT
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oh this is going to be intense. but what about kyo? i mean he seems more conected to tohru then yuki is. i don't know... this is going to be hard. can't wait for the next update.
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Title: Tainted Choices
Reviewed By: Alaskanbeauty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2007 12:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMFG!!!!!!!!!!! I have never read anything that made me this mad, I swear, You are an outstanding author and to bring such emotions out in the reader is incredible. Please write something that KILLS OFF this sick pig Akito...god if anyone deserves it she/he does and make sure this pig is raped as well before it dies so he/she will know what it feels like to have real FEAR......Please kill this pig off :O}
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Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2007 20:14 CST
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Second time I've read through and still loving it! Pretty please put up more! I'm begging you. Why not make it your New Year's resolution to stop torturing your devoted readers. ^^;;;; Gomen, gomen. But it is torture waiting to read more considering how great of a story it is. Happy writings! ~Your dedicated fan, 'Tori-chan~ P.S. I have up my second Furuba fic (wich obviously centers around the lovable, tragic 'Tori-san) if you would like to read.
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Reviewed By: Oogieone [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2006 02:50 CDT
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I have proofread the chapters again and fixed a couple of spellcheck errors and I also seperated the paragraphs when people spoke...I do have a tendency to write very long chapters...but I prefer it that way. I hate it when I am readin a fic and they have 500 words a chapter or something. Hopefully it is a bit easier to read now. I will be posting another couple of chapters soon. As for who Tohru will end up with...that is yet to be determined and you may be surprised. Although I do admit, I am a Yuki fangirl. Thanks for everyone's reviews...
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Reviewed By: Klove0511 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2006 17:24 CDT
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Hello! Thanks for reviewing my story! I've actually been reading this one for a while, but figured I should finally review. It's pretty good, overall. There's a lot of proofreading work that you could do to make it better, but overall, not bad. One thing I MUST say... When someone new speaks, make a new paragraph. Your paragraphs can get long as it is, and if multiple people are speaking, it gets VERY confusing. Besides, it's proper grammar to start a new paragraph when someone new starts talking. Anyway, cute story, I'm sensing that it'll be Yukiru, which makes me sad, but even that pairing has its merits. :)
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Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 19:15 CDT
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O.O You can't leave off like that! What is Kyo going to say?! Is she going to tell him and Yuki that it was Hatori?! By the way, taht was an awesome twist that I was completely not expecting. You did that really well. I was wondering when she said that it was a familiar voice who it could be, but I never expected Hatori. You actually might like my Fruits Basket fic since it's a HatorixTohru pairing, but unfortunately, I haven't gotten to write any truly angsty fics like my nature is. Soon I will come out with a Fruits Basket fic hopefully as heartwrenching as yours. I like the fact that you use such proper conventions (grammar, spelling, etc.). That seems to be rare on this site for some odd reason. >.> I think it's great how you let the reader sympathise with Tohru through your descriptions, but you don't bore us to death with too many. Just the right amount! ^_^ Well, hopefully you'll update this story soon 'cause I really want to read more and it's too excellent to leave alone. Happy writings and may writer's block steer clear of a 1 mile radius around you. Just to be safe. It's quite contagious. I know from first-hand experience. ^^;;; Ja ne. ~Tori-chan~ (not to be confused with 'Tori-san)
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Title: Updating soon
Reviewed By: Oogieone [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2005 06:02 CDT
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I am sorry I have been out of town for a while but I should be posting an update tomorrow or the bnext day! Thanks for your reviews!
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Reviewed By: KagomeMaire On: September 03, 2005 23:59 CDT
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yeah plz update
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Reviewed By: kagome95323 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2005 06:56 CDT
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plz update ive been waiting foreyer for u to update!!!!! WAAAAHHHH!!!! poor tohru
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Reviewed By: Oogieone [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 16:30 CDT
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Good point about the pregnancy thing...I am revising that area so that it fits the correct time frame. Yes, Akito is evil...that is for sure...keep reading I will update soon! Thanks for reviewing!
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Reviewed By: The Enforcer On: July 19, 2005 12:13 CDT
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This is a very interersting story, I like and I'm not sure where you're going with Akito wanting a baby, the previous review was right about the pregnacy stuff. I want to read more though so please do keep writing..!
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Reviewed By: Kitsuki On: July 13, 2005 14:32 CDT
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The plot seems, um interesting. I don't know exactly what you have planned, but it's setting up nicly. Poor Tohru though. =( *cries* AND STUPID AKITO! Though you can't tell if you're pregnant until a couple of weeks after conception, and morning sickness doesn't set in until then either. I hope you update soon, though. I'll definately keep reading!
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