|"The Beautiful Howling" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ]|
| Reviewed By: firewings [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2005 12:25 CDT|
Style of Writing: 10 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
well its good but what happen to kiba and hige will they find out? will toboe and tsume have kids i really dont care about that but i want to hear the rest of the story.ok
| Reviewed By: Bombayoni [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2005 14:09 CDT|
whoa you must keep it up now... for I am eagerly awaiting it... now please!
| Reviewed By: email@example.com On: July 20, 2005 23:26 CDT|
Interesting twist to see Toboe written as a female. It has potential, if you keep Toboe in-character as much as possible. Before posting more, you should brush up on how to use punctuation in speech. "… "Clumsy.", he said. …" In this example (taken from your story) the comma after the quotation mark should be placed before the quotation mark. The period before the quotation mark should be eliminated. "… "It's not my fault!", she yelled. …" Here, the comma is not needed. As well, running your work through a spell-checker is always a good idea. No one is perfect; typos happen to all writers. A spell-checker picks up errors the eye may miss, such as 'prbably', 'heda' and 'woud'. If you don't have a spell-check program built into your word processor, there's a free online version at www.spellcheck.net. Spend a few extra minutes proofing your work before posting and readers will thank you.
| Reviewed By: Bombayoni [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 22:06 CDT|
love it... a bit wierded out by female toboe, but it wroks