Reviewed By: DFourthHorseman [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2002 22:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this story. My only comments are that I thinked you gave a lil too much angst and drama in the middle, too much comedy in the end and not else, and not enough romance in the end. The story was really original and ironic that Enshi was the one that was really responsible for bringing them together, though I think the story would have done fine without the schemer's comic relief. The style is good, a lil spelling mistake here and there, but still great. Like I said the only real suggestion I have would be to have distributed the comedy and romance better and toned down on the angst. Anywayz, this story was really great and I loved reading it. |
