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| "Unreal Perfection" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Foxtail On: September 10, 2005 12:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HAHA!!! THIS IS SO AWESOME!! i LOVE it!! i have to agree with elvert! it IS a masterpiece! and i also love Orochimaru's comments! they rock! good job!
| Reviewed By: Dragon Charm [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2005 00:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HAHAHAHAHAHA!!! This is sheer genius! *dies laughing(
| Reviewed By: Elvert On: August 26, 2005 17:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wow, it's really gret an OMG so funny! Sharikugan... THIS is just a masterpiece!!! And your Mary Sue is just what she is in fact. Poor Neji... And lucky Lee - he has those eyebrows, so he is in safe from IT. :))) I hope. Really like him. ^_^ Oh, and by the way - two-tailed neko is just what I always expected from Miss Mary Sue. Keep writing!! Onegai... *puppy eyes*
| Reviewed By: TastesOfCyanide On: August 14, 2005 17:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oooh man this is funny. Orochimaru's interjections are great. And yeah, I think you got just about every disturbing Mary-Sue cliché in there. Kudos, that must have taken some doing. I particularly like the hair and the eyes *snicker* The italics make it mildly hard to read; you could just flip from third person to first person randomly, you know, like a few other authors on mm.org *heavy sigh* Mind you, for my sanity's sake, I appreciate the fact you put in some separation between the two. There's probably a rich vein to mine when The Horror gets around to meeting Kakashi (poor guy) and Sasuke (he's the Mary-Sue's preferred victim I believe). And of course, one must not forget the other inhabitants of Clichéville, hyperactive, brainless Naruto and the pestilential, much-bashed Sakura. Oh yes. Our journey to the dark side has just begun...
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