| "Witness" Reviews/Comments [ 90 ] |
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Title: Chapter 02
Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2005 00:10 PDT
Comment/Review:
I agree with Midnight Cereal. This chapter is probably the best thing you've written that I've read. Nice command of invective too. :)
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Title: Hot damn! Are you *serious*?
Reviewed By: MidnightCereal [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2005 16:24 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked everything about this. Shinji's fumbling attempts to excuse Ritsuko, Asuka's straight-to-the-marrow realism, Misato's waffling between staggering guilt and wire-trip rage. The characters and dialogue are just carrying this, man. I can't wait for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: D.R. On: September 17, 2005 06:28 PDT
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Though 'Witness' is kinda similar to 'a past to forget' ('Innocence lost' I haven't read) I actually enjoyed it more. What really bugged me about 'past' was Asuka's characterisation, in most fics she's either too kind and emotional or a completely unsympathetic bitch, I think you pulled off her character rather well. Actually I think most of the characters are relatively IC (except Ritsuko, but she has to be completely OOC for this fic to work on any level). Your story is nicely dark, and I look forward to it getting very much darker.
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Title: Great work
Reviewed By: Bain0001 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2005 16:42 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hate stories like this... the kind that you read and want to read more of but there isn't any more... yet... I hope it's yet. Please continue this fic, I want to know what happens! I don't think this is a rip off of Random's work. It's different enough, and your writing style is different. I like it. The dark tone of the story appeals to me, I enjoy dark/angst stories. To be honest, while not an originial idea for an EVA fic, it is pulled off very well with how you paced the release of information and details on what was truely going on. Also, creating a situation in which Asuka is actually a sympathetic character is very interestingly done. Keep up the great work and I am waiting for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: refan19 On: September 03, 2005 23:32 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
good story but way too graphic man.
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Reviewed By: dennisud2015 On: September 02, 2005 21:52 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A bit too graphic, but quite understandable given the situation. As with your other story you seem to take the long and painful road to an end. This one IMHO will drag Asuka into Shinji's level of dispair... and that might be the key to force the issue within his own ego. dennisud
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Reviewed By: Mercaba On: September 02, 2005 20:01 PDT
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Mercaba here...I liked it ^_^
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Title: Where Am I?
Reviewed By: Ghost140 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 19:49 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ill keep reading as they come
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Reviewed By: techiet [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 14:35 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good stuff. Hope to see more soon~
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Title: Title
Reviewed By: Name/Nick Required On: September 01, 2005 08:41 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Succeeds at creepiness. Fails at credible characterization for Ritsu, who is screwed up but not THAT screwed up, nor did she show any sign in the series of either pedophilia or being attracted to anyone but Gendo. It's good enough that I'll keep looking for updates.
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Reviewed By: JWMA On: August 31, 2005 23:06 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Now this is an interesting idea. I plan to read the rest of this as its posted, and I normally HATE angsty fics. Not much else to say except please update soon.
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Title: Chapter 01
Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2005 19:24 PDT
Comment/Review:
You shocked and appalled me, as intended. Well-written. The characters are actually *more* screwed up than in canon. Good job.
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Reviewed By: Lord_Raa [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2005 15:41 PDT
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Dark, but very good stuff.
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Title: Not bad Adam
Reviewed By: Konous the grey [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2005 14:24 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dear Adam, Howdy, remember me Konous? Well here's my review for Witness. Okay, good story, me likes a da dark eh stories. Anyway, rip off? I think not, while yes similar you've made it your own style, in your own way. I think you pulled off Gendo VERY nicely, really uncaring. Rei, well done. Misato as well, I wonder what she did while she spent the night with him in his room while he slept? I admit when I saw the description 'Shinji gets ripped apart' I thought you meant physically, then I saw who wrote it and thought 'Eh can't be some gruesome fic' what do ya know, this fic was good. I just hope there's a happy ending. Pleeeeease let there be a happy ending.
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Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Nick2951 On: August 31, 2005 11:29 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I have no words on how good but twisted this fic truly is. I hope you continue it.
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