Title: FFARG Review Reviewed By:Yuugi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2005 19:18 CST Comment/Review: This story was very touching and heart-wrenching in a good way. The emotions are expressed very well. The accent you put into your characters' voices portrays their ethnic background wonderfully. You do have some common grammar and punctuation mistakes as well as a few spelling mistakes. I recommend finding a beta-reader to help revise your story. A good place to find them would be on the MM.org forum on the beta-readers list. Beta-readers can do wonders for your story and bring out the best in it. Overall, I enjoyed this story very much. You have a knack at detailed descriptions and a very beautiful writing style. Fix your small mistakes and this piece of fiction would be perfect.
