Reviewed By: Renchio [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2005 01:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good story, very well written..the self censoring thing was a little annoying, but thats ok ^__^. There were a few things that bothered me. One was that Shuuichi wouldnt call Yuki by Eiri..and once you pick the name (eiri-san, or eiri-kun) dont change then around. the other thing, is that Touma wasnt really in character. i cant see him doing some of the things you have him doing. But other than those two things, i loved it, and i think you should definately continue! i would love to see how you work in the next part.. i will be keepin an eye out for the next chapter! Cheers and mada mada dane!
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