Reviewed By: Ardwynna [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2005 04:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You obviously put a lot of effort into this. There were a few technical details that piled up and got in the way, tense errors, misplaced apostrophes and the like. Otherwise the wording was strong, if a touch distant and cold. Be mindful of run-on sentences. It's best to spell out numbers rather than use digits. The skipping back and forth in the timeline is a bold attempt, not often tried in the fandom as far as I've seen. The transitions were a little disjointed, possibly because of the quotations demarcating the separate sections so clearly. Hojo's hidden paternal attidtude was portrayed fairly well and there was a sense that Sephiroth was becoming unhinged. Not a bad read overall.
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