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| "A Hot and Steamy Betrayal, Yet so Clold" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Yusagi Sombermoon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2006 15:05 CDT
Comment/Review:
Very vindictive...^-^' It kind of felt spoofy, because I doubt Miaka would do that...she'd suffer a heckuva lot more anguish and freaking out before she actually decided on killing herself over that. Tama has some endurance, eh? Anyway, fairly good for a mindless smut, anyway. As long as you don't take it too seriously, I don't see much of a problem with it.
| Reviewed By: toasterwoman360 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2006 16:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
It needs work. I agree with Dot totally.
| Reviewed By: Dot. On: December 10, 2005 19:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
"OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHH! TAMAHOME!! YOU FUCK ME SO GOOOOOD!" Yui moaned out in pleasure. "YUUUUUUUUUUUUI! YOU'VE GOT THE TIGHTEST CUNT I'VE EVER ENTERED!!!!!" Tamahome screamed out. Uh. That was WAYYYY overused. This fanfic was incredibly cliche and really pointless. I noticed you used the cliche 'OH, YOU FUCK ME SO GOOD' in the other stories too, and you need to find a replacement. Please keep trying!
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