|"Expect the unexpected" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ]|
| Reviewed By: Romanitza On: September 16, 2010 01:58 CDT|
Style of Writing: 1 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10
No offense, but they way Setsuna kept slapping Takato was nothing short of being an utter bitch. I can't stand characters like her, acting all hyper and happy but slapping guys all the time. Someone seriously needs to slap her across the face for acting like a bitch. It doesn't make her an enjoyable character to read about. Slapping people without any reasonable reason is not sassy or fiesty. I would never, ever stand anyone, no matter who they are to me, to slap someone around for something so stupid. And something else that bothers me, in the first chapter you had random symbols like "-" before a new line. What is up with that. Sorry, I can't give this a good rating. The main character is not at all endearing, so much so that I want to hit her. And the grammar isn't the best.
| Title: coollll|
Reviewed By: horsesrocketh [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2007 16:39 CDT
you need to continue *nod* i love it!