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| "From Penguin Village with Love" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: hhhm dr-slump-sood-be-medamier
Reviewed By: dr-fan/mai-lover On: February 03, 2013 20:53 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hhhhmdr-salump-sood-be-part-of-medimaier-bcsuse-dr-salump-is-inporit | Title: FFARG Ch. 1 Review
Reviewed By: Shinashi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2006 20:53 EDT
Comment/Review:
Firstly, I love the actions. I've never seen any sounds so accurate in my life before. Most would use similies and the like. The story is also very well done, especially the feelings the characters were having. It was also equally fantastic on the personalities of the characters whom I'm not familiar with. Cons are semicolons which are needed between two sentences with the same relative idea. There's also some verbs and words that are missing their endings. Also, I'm unfamiliar with the crows... So it may be regular intention to have them speak right?... Alright.. Nothing really bad at all.. Your sequencing is awesome also, it didn't seem broken in any places I noticed. Thanks for submitting your fic to the FFARG! Hope you continue to do so! P.S. Your sense of humor is absolutely wonderful. :D
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