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| "Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: ffARG!
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2005 19:21 CST
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Drabbles are always a "to each his own" type of situation; however, there are a few essentials to a decent drabble such as proper grammar and spelling. When there is so little content, correct grammar and spelling are very important, and those are two easily repairable issues. Another thing about "Darkness" is that it really is *very* short. I feel that it could have been elaborated upon just a little more to draw a reader in. As it "Darkness" is, I find it a little flat. Thank you for submitting to FFARG. Enjoy the holidays! --Dee
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Yuugi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2005 19:07 CST
Comment/Review:
Thank you for submitting your story to the FFARG. First off, I want to commend you on your ability to hold an emotional tone to your writing. Story-wise, your fanfiction is well written, but there are a few issues you might want to work on. You have a one or two grammar errors and in one sentence you need capitalization. You also seemed to switch tenses at certain points in the story. You have a few spelling errors which can easily be fixed by running your story through your word processor's spell-check. I recommend a quick self-revision of your story before posting. Overall, I enjoyed reading this story and its emotional tone. Keep it up!
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