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| "Merry Christmas, Davis." Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: This is incredibly OOC
Reviewed By: Kari Izumi [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2006 18:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
There are a few problems with this story. 1) The lack of quotation marks, like the last review remarked on 2)I can't see Kari cheating on a boyfriend, and even if she would, I don't think she'd be so cruel and stupid as to fool around with a fellow chosen, if for no other reason than...they have a lot more integrty than that. For all their conflicts, TK and Davis *are* friends. 3) Sora's crush on Davis comes from nowhere. They hardly interact in the series, and should have been developed more. 4) The writing overall sort of falls flat. Everything feels extrememly rushed through. One thing I will give props for it doing a very unusual pairing. Sora/Davis is hardly ever seen, which is why I checked this story out. But I thought this could have been better.
| Reviewed By: Evil Fang [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2005 21:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good story it was short but was good all it needs is " " then it would be perfect also tone down the cussing a tinnnny bit k
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