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| "Can You See Me Now?" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Koji Hikari [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2007 11:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!! I have always had not so pure thoughts about those two. lol Keep going.
| Title: NNNEEERRRGGG!! I'LL DESTROY YOU!!
Reviewed By: Meargoge On: July 16, 2006 16:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the way that you have made it a-ahem-slightly slow transition to honesty with Ayeka's true feeling and Ryoko admitting her's. Please write more like this!
| Reviewed By: Amalthea [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2006 13:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it, it wasn't too fluffy and it wasn't too cold. I thought that Ryoko's advances were realistic enough, but Ayeka wouldn't have reacted like that... there would have been steps in between oh, I think I like you and ok, your coming with me to bed. I actually think that if it was going to take that jump there would have been a lot less talking and more physical advances right there, I would fully expect Ryoko to act much more instinctively on the spot than drag her to bed anyway. Ayeka would have been much more surprised I think. It was fun to read though, good job!
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