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| "SIGHTSEEING" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: ExpressMail [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2007 02:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have a great plot on your hands. You stumbled onto something great, but you need to learn how to mold it. You need to learn not to spell out everything, leave somethings to the imagination, and not to overuse accenting effects like bold print. It's a great story, and I give you props for the concept and the characters you've portrayed, but your execution needs a bit of work. Maybe a beta reader would help? Find someone on the site who's work you admire deeply, and see if they'll help you. I think you've got a lot of potential, you just need to refine it. This isn't a flame, this is a genuine review. Good luck in your pursuit to being a great writer. You've got it in you.
| Reviewed By: Leslie On: January 26, 2006 11:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is sooooooo cool! YOU are going on my Toolbar.
| Reviewed By: Asaka_Sama [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2006 06:41 CST
Comment/Review:
I'm really enjoying this so far! You need to remember that when somebody talks, it's a new paragraph. Once Person A stops talking, you need tou double space so Person B can start talking. Besides that, this is a very nice fic. Update soon!
| Reviewed By: WickedGame [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2006 22:39 CST
Comment/Review:
a little rushed sounding at points, but still good. of course, i am easy to please. i hope to see an update soon, since this story is still in its early stages.
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