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| "Eclipse" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Shakeval [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2006 06:30 CST
Comment/Review:
a very interesting idea, but what happened to kira that caused the change into the giant nine tails that attacked konoha? well it will be interesting to see what happens.
| Reviewed By: hinata fan On: January 20, 2006 19:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
haha nice! wright more soon!!
| Title: Hmm..
Reviewed By: Katana14 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 17:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It sounds very interesting. It definately caught my attention apart from the other stories in the search. It's detailed decently, and you speak well in the story. Perhaps you could bring a bit more detail to the characters. Not overexaggerated, but enough to where we can see the change. When you said that Kyuubi/Kiri was missing for fifteen years, Tsunade-sama and Kakashi-sama happened to agree with that. Does that mean that Naruto and co. have all grown three years? Or do you have another idea for those two years? Ne' way, the way you've so far focused from Nehru's point of view is interesting, and would probably make the story very unique should you somehow continue the whole story this way. Also, one last thing. The plot line intrigues me, and I've recently taken up BETA-ing for a friend of mine on her Naruto fanfiction [u]None the Wiser[/u]. I'd be intrested in BETA-ing your story as well if you would like that? I only edit grammar and spelling, and give advice on what I've basically mentioned in the beginning of this review. If you don't want me or others to suggest BETA-ing this, I'll back off and read happily as a fan. Keep writing. This looks really good, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: Mysic_Rose [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2006 03:35 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's good.. Keep it up and update soon!...
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