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| "Damned From the Start" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Arbitrary Doom [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 04:37 CDT
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........why is the ed gone?.........*tear*..................good story............but ed does realize he left his brother (now human and for the most part defenceless) all alone in a room full of angry undead things.........right?........well what ever..........XP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Title: Child Xylia (I have an account.)
Reviewed By: Child Xylia [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2006 20:47 CDT
Comment/Review:
A little typical, and there were some grammitical errors, but I liked it. =)
| Title: FFRG
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 11:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
Some errors that I remembered were: spaces between the quotation mark and the first word, forgotten commas for direct address, and a forgotten closing quotation mark at one point nearing the end. There's probably a few more that I'm not writing down, so just read this over again carefully or get a beta-reader. Overall, I thought that this was a good, angsty-ridden, one-shot. It had an awesome, opening and a memorable, unhappy ending. And the characters all acted very appropriately. Thank you for submitting to FFRG and good luck with the writing!
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