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| "Gundam Waltz" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: KrystalFoxx [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2007 16:01 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
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This story has potential, but the grammatical mistakes are huge! I was able to struggle through the first page but it just wasn't worth the effort to keep on going. I shouldn't have to work to read something. Your main problem is using words incorrectly and you also seem to have a problem with tenses. For example, on the first page the assassin should have "dove" not "dive". I'm not bashing on the story itself, just the way it's been presented to us. I suggest you find yourself a beta.
| Reviewed By: Shalua On: May 23, 2007 03:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, me again! it just struck me that I didn't tell you how I like your story! So: Being honest I have to say that you're not exactly featuring my favourite pairings, but I'm reading the story nonetheless, so you're good, cause normally I just skip the fics that don't ;)
| Reviewed By: Shalua On: May 23, 2007 03:20 CDT
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Uhm, you know, I don't wanna be a wiseacre, but I'm from germany and your translation is not quite correct. 'quiet my child' would be: "Still, mein Kind" or "Ruhig, mein Kind" and I guess ..Rechtjunge..is only a typo and supposed to be: ..Recht, Junge... ... hope you're not angry with me, I was trying to help.
| Reviewed By: forever_rootless [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2006 16:08 CST
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oh my god! heero has a relative? you have got to give me more of this story needs details!!!
| Reviewed By: sindylucu On: July 12, 2006 13:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
let me check it out its the first time i see it, but It is a fics from you that was the only reason I will read it
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