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| "Use and Release" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: Regret
Reviewed By: Mercaba On: February 16, 2006 18:57 CST
Comment/Review:
This is exactly what i didn't want my story to become
| Title: Regret
Reviewed By: Mercaba On: February 15, 2006 22:42 CST
Comment/Review:
This is exactly what i didn't want my story to become
| Title: ANONYMOUS DOES NOT FORGIVE
Reviewed By: A. Nonymous On: February 13, 2006 22:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wrong on multiple levels. Violates series continuity (it was Misato's idea for Shinji to let Toji and Kensuke into the entry plug in the first place, not his), but that is very minor. Shinji the sex machine getting pimped out by one of the hard-headed women in his life to all the hard-up women of Tokyo-3 has been done before. Free clue: the idea is so ridiculous that it only works as a very, very short comedy piece, perhaps as a zany omake added at the end of something more serious. You are trying to play it straight, for angst. It doesn't work. "Shinji has been sexually abused" has also been done before, less ridiculously, and it can work if played for angst--but this is way, way too heavy-handed. This fails. Try again.
| Reviewed By: MV On: February 13, 2006 16:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an interesting take on the Shinji knows more than he should concept. However, I am curious. It says this work is completed, but the ending leaves it with a more open feel. As we know, Shinji is pulled out of the EVA later. Could he be upset that he was taken from his mother, and as a result, go from submissive to authoritative? (That'd be sweet.^_^) Anyways, just wondering if this is truly a one-shot. Email me at Metroidvania@hotmail.com either way to inform me of the status, and if you need a beta. This fic truly was kind of wrong, but you did manage to keep at least somewhat tasteful. Good work. Later, MV
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