| Title: Improve pls...|
Reviewed By: davish666 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2006 03:12 EST
Style of Writing: 9 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
No offense buddy, but I can't get the setting right, it is as if readers will not know when and where it happend, and you have to improve on that :), the details are too specified as well and it makes your story sooo... long, no offense okay buddy, but please continue writing and update soon.