| "While You Were Sleeping" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Nakada93 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2006 19:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
That was a great piece of writing.
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Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Shinashi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2006 18:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
Excuse me. I had noticed an error while rechecking my review and had messed up the sentence. *The only things wrong WERE the little BITS of unseen commas...Again, excuse me! :D
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Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Shinashi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2006 18:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
This was a sweet little fic. It had the calm personalities of the characters mentioned and that was done quite well. The only things wrong is a little bit of unseen commas that should be visible. As in this sentence- What are you doing here runt?- There should be a common after 'here'. And here- She shivered a little in the cool night air, and was surprised to feel- The comma is not needed because you are using a verb phrase which uses the exact same subject 'She'. A beta could easily help you with that. Again, a really sweet fic. :D
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Reviewed By: inuyasha_cute_doggy_ears (nsi) On: March 07, 2006 16:09 CST
Comment/Review:
awwwwwww! that was sooooo cute! awwwwwww!
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Reviewed By: Dark Angel Of Love [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2006 14:33 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was soo cute ^___^
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