| Title: FFARG|
Reviewed By: Shinashi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2006 19:22 CDT
First, I love the dynamic build-up. This one-shot held a lot despite its shortness. Secondly, joined ideas should have a conjunction AND a comma. Also, I highly recommend using this device - http://www.spellcheck.net/ - There weren't that many spelling errors but there was these certain words that stuck out, ya' know? As a side note, you have a knack for expressing emotions, I admire that! Thank you for submitting your fic! :D P.S. What in the world does 2501 mean? It sounds familiar... ^-^??