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| "Neji's Flower...Tenten!" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: WAR!
Reviewed By: Seiryu_Suboshi-san [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2008 14:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is war, no da. Neji is mine. We had a fanfight over him on Fanfiction.net. hehehe. It was funny, no da. Loved it, but the comment thing... Don't do it. Very distracting.
| Title: Good Enough
Reviewed By: Dragon's Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2006 21:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have a lot of skill, but you also ruined that a lot. Don't cut into your fic and add comments; it's not welcome. It distracts from the point. And you broke into paragraphs far too much, then cut them short. You shouldn't put in a line of sentences that reiterate your subject or crawl it along; those should be large paragraphs. You only need to break off into a paragraph when the subject changes: when they think something different, when they speak, when they think of something new. Neji and Tenten are cute together, yes, but you also let Neji fall for Tenten far too quickly, and gave almost no thought to Tenten's feelings by not letting her point of view in. Everything else was perfectly fine; you're very good at descriptions when you get going, and use metaphors a lot. Perhaps a little too much, at that. Read over your story and you may understand what I mean. Better yet, compare yours to a truly fine work of written art, such as 'The Lucky Ones' by Terri Botta. You won't find a finer fanfiction anywhere, but beware the written lovemaking at chapter 20 or so. (If you can't find it in Search, that may be because you don't have its rating included in the search. Search for 'all ratings'.)
| Title: ^____________^
Reviewed By: theSKiEisFALLING [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2006 20:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
boo! omg this of course means war!!! NEJI IS MINE!!! fweeheehee! lol i loved this its really cute. i read all your others too and they're all good! i made a fun pairing tooooo! its in my spirited away/naruto story. actually more like a triangle? SasuChihHak lol ^__^ please make a cool pairing with kiba okie??
| Title: =D
Reviewed By: raiia_xx [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2006 21:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ewahhhh, I love this story... Before I never really liked the whole tenten/neji pairing... >< but this is so cute. I read your other stories too. =D I loved them all. keep writing!
| Title: FINISHED!!!!
Reviewed By: anime_gal1 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2006 18:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story is FINISHED!!!!!But it was sooo good.I loved it.You should make another one like that,please!!!!But still can't belive it's completed.
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