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| "The Big Break-Up" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: SlickRCBD [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2006 16:37 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is a great take on an old idea. BTW, except for that bath scene near the end, the story's rating could be downgraded to Y. It might even pass muster with the scene. One thing is, even with that scene at the end, it's still not clear what exactly the aliens did to Ranma. Was it making his girl-side fall in love with him, or was it the link? All and all, it was an execellent piece of writing!
| Reviewed By: no one important On: May 11, 2006 00:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your writing is superb and your stories are very enertaining
| Title: You going to finish?
Reviewed By: DrewB1442 On: May 07, 2006 16:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You going to work on this anytime soon? You have yet to get to the lemon part.
| Reviewed By: Lord_Raa [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2006 13:12 EDT
Comment/Review:
So far, I like it. Needs more filth, though. One can never have too much filth in a lemon.
| Title: YOU ARE A GOD!
Reviewed By: superfan On: May 04, 2006 22:51 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!! This story was one of the best stories I have ever read! Great job! I also agree about your views on Akane. Shampoo and Ukyou are my personal favorites. They are, as you said far superior in every aspect than Akane! Update soon please, I am dieing to read what is gonna happen next! Yet again fantastic job on such a unique and interesting story!
| Reviewed By: Al On: May 04, 2006 13:26 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really good stuff. Ranma/Ranko stories are almost always enjoyable, and your writing style is excellent. Looking forward to more.
| Reviewed By: Hiryo [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2006 06:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really really nice story that I hope will get soon updated. ;)
| Reviewed By: Neil Lennon On: May 03, 2006 03:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good characterization and very fun to read. Keep it comeing.
| Reviewed By: goku_90504 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2006 02:15 EDT
Comment/Review:
out of all the F's in ranma's life akane was the best (not that she was all that great she was the best) akane was the only one who felt ranma had the right to choose who he marries shampoo is perfectly willing to drug and rape ranma true akane has a temper and hits ranma way to much but she's just inmature and needs to do some growing up out of all the girls ranma is engaged to (the F's as i called up them earlyer in this same reveiw) only akane was willing to let ranma make his own choice about who he marries kodachi shampoo and ukyo all tried to take advantage of him when he was in a simaler state to having been druged with rohipnal or simaler date rape drugs only akane wanted to protect him untill the "drug" wore off
| Reviewed By: Brett W. Hall On: May 01, 2006 13:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A good read, I must say. While splitting Ranma into male and female halves is hardly original, the way it was accomplished was and that you have kept Ranko as close as you have to the Ranma characterization, albeit one that is clearly female and possessing a spine... is utterly refreshing. While it is clearly obvious that Ranma is to be paired up with Ranko (a rare match-up, despite what other may claim), I noticed that the possibility of including others had not been ruled out (save for Akane, my profound thanks). I do have a request, though, in regards to your portrayal of Nabiki, should she be considered... can you not have her coming across as a prostitute, as she appears in one of your other fics? Yes, I am aware that she'll hardly do anything unless money is involved, but... does she have to be almost completely amoral? And by that, I mean, willing to do anything (with the possible exception of cold-blooded murder) for money. Leave her with at least some things that she won't do for money... like sex. And yes, I am fully aware that love and sex are two completely different things (despite the belief of many that one equals the other). I'm more realistic, and less romantic, than to believe that myth. The Nabiki you portrayed in "A Change in Him" came across as an extremely jaded prostitute (at least that appeared to be the persona she was attempting to put forward) with a talent for deluding herself about her emotions and attraction to Ranma nearly as great as Akane's. It was, for me, an exceptional turn-off... you could have had Ranma actually seeing a professional prostitute instead of Nabiki and it wouldn't have affected the story in the least. With the other girls in that story, there was something to attract Ranma's (and the reader's interest in them as a person). With Nabiki's portrayal... Nada! She was there to be used for sexual relief, period.
| Reviewed By: BlacShade On: May 01, 2006 09:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic was very interesting to read. I liked the whole saving the alien and the irony with the whole honour bound to repay the life debt. Ties in nicely with ranma's honour. The spelling and grammar was excellent as well, all to often I find a good idea gets ruined by bad spelling or horrible grammar. The fact that the story is not speeding along doesnt really bother, it just wouldnt seem realistic if ranma suddenly started screwing ranko on the third chapter. I imagine it will start picking up speed as you go along. The idea with the amazons and Cologne knowing how to continue the Neko-Ken training was an interesting twist. I dont think I have ever read that particular cure. I have seen a similar instance though, It was done by an author of the name TheGrum. It was an intersting fic. Anyway i like the whole issue with Cologne being under pressure from the council back in china, very believable that was. The whole library of porn that Nodoka had was also quite funny, i liked that quite a bit. So far the whole direction this story is goind does seem very good, at least to me anyway, please keep up the good work. One idea you may like is if any of the others coomplete their requirements for the cure you could also have the aliens do a little cosmetic surgery on their minds, maybe make em less likely to attempt to screw up Ranma or Ranko's life, something along those lines, but this should probably only be done to charcters that you want out of the way... Another idea is ranma and ranko goin through with the neko training and maybe one or both of them go into heat while in the neko state... I could probably think up more ideas but this isnt my story, but I did very much enjoy reading it.
| Reviewed By: ascended_warrior [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2006 09:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It has been quite a while since I read a good Ranma/Ranko pairing, let alone one that is this complete, please finish this story.
| Reviewed By: keichan On: May 01, 2006 08:47 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
For a lemon, it is particularly well structured, and with only one hot scene in 9 chapters, I consider your fic as a story fully detailed, instead of a plotless lemon. This is good! Please continue soon.
| Reviewed By: tomdj1701 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2006 00:42 EDT
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lol, loved it.
| Reviewed By: HappyPig [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 16:45 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another Great Fic from NullFactor, and this one seems especially interesting, cant wait to see what further plans Ranko has for her Ranma.
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