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| "Why Don't You Entertain?" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2006 13:52 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh I hope yuo continue this.
| Title: Perhaps...
Reviewed By: Val Kyrie [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2006 18:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm not bad, considering how you haven't seen the later episodes. It is a wonder why Kyouya never seems that active in the foreground, but he does much better behind than the scenes, and as long as the Host Club works, then that's alright. I gave you an overall rating of 8, anyway, because there were hitches in your writing where you wrote one too many words that were superfluous or jarring in some of Kyouya's dialogue, as well as failing in parts to form distinctions between the dialogue of Kyouya and Haruhi. Nevertheless, you do write well and a writer with that much can certainly go a long way. Shame your fic isn't longer - it has a lot of potential. I'm sorry to say that I don't support the Kyouya/Haruhi pairing, preferring instead Kyouya/Kaoru (I'm working on a way to justify this), but each to their own, hmm?
| Title: Love the story...
Reviewed By: FireCharmer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2006 01:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story, very cute. you should really expand. I noticed that in your disclamer you said that you have only seen 4 episodes of Host Club, I was wondering where? I have never seen the anime, just the manga. I would love to know where you saw them, my e-mail is cosmicgypsy10021@lycos.com. if you could, could you let me know where? please? I really do think you should write a longer Haruhi and Kyoya story, but it's up to you. - FireCharmer
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