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| "** Science Lab Screwyness**" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: *sob*
Reviewed By: simple_things On: September 24, 2006 17:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
Why haven't you updated? ;_; *cries*
| Reviewed By: simple_things On: July 31, 2006 11:03 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh, this is neat! I do agree with Smilez though. Update soon!!! ^_^
| Reviewed By: smilez On: July 14, 2006 00:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a nice story, I like it. But I do have some suggestions. Gilly and Faith's chapters should be more spread out like Jimmi's chapters, it's easier to read that way than reading one big clump. Also, it might be good to be a bit more descriptive. What do the teachers look like? How is the classroom arranged? Help the reader's imagination out a little. I rather do like the characters though. They are completely different, Faith being a popular who hates her role in society, Gilly, a gentle giant from the South and Jimmi, a problematic character who seems to have trouble focusing. And yet they manage to have formed a bond. This is a really good story all in all. Please, continue.
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