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"Alchemists and Thieves" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ]
 Reviewed By: flame_alchemist_lover101 [MediaMiner Member]  On: January 04, 2007 18:55 CST
Comment/Review:
Come on plz u have 2 add more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 Reviewed By: trichloroethane [MediaMiner Member]  On: June 14, 2006 11:47 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10
Comment/Review:
Style: Engaging, interesting style. Not boring and not horrifically pretentious, so that's good. You also managed to keep everyone in character, so that's an extra plus, as the fic didn't dissolve into chaos. However, the whole fic seems a bit rushed, so perhaps you might want to try adding just a tad more description and taking more time to actually focus on the characters' feelings and thoughts as well. Spelling: A lot of careless mistakes i.e. words jumbled together, 'come on'/'c'mon' being written as 'comon'...stuff like that really turns me off. Grammar is passable, so you can look at this score solely as spelling. Your grammar's fine; just be careful. I suggest you use spell-check and just do a quick re-read of your stuff, or get a beta if you're too impatient to (I know I am). Creativity: I've only seen two other fics with this combination, and yours is pretty good. I'm really interested in how you'll make this work, so keep going! Enjoyment: I would have enjoyed it more if your spelling and grammar were a bit better, as bad spelling and careless mistakes generally turn me off and I get annoyed by these really easily. However, from the plot angle, yes I did enjoy this fic and it was really the spelling that pulled you down. Overall: It's the average of all your other scores. 'Nuff said. Other:Overall, a really good fanfic with lots of potential and the plot seems quite solid so far. Pretty straightforward so far; will there be a mystery in the works perhaps? I think the only piece of constructive criticism I can give you here is: USE SPELL-CHECK, GET A BETA OR PROOF-READ YOUR WORK YOURSELF. I think that it's a shame that the spelling's a bit off, as it's clear that you have a really good idea going for you. Take your time; no one will really care if it means that they get a better-quality chapter in the end. I'm sorry if I have offended you in any way. Keep writing, and I think you'll do just fine provided you take your time and keep your spelling mistakes in check.
 Reviewed By: w_welcome_w [MediaMiner Member]  On: June 08, 2006 11:48 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
Its pretty good. Yor a good writer... keep up the great work, I want to read more! ^^

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